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Hello!
If you would like an answer, please include a specific question. Example questions are:
- I know something is wrong with the chin of the person I'm painting, but I don't know what it is exactly and how to fix it?
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Let me know if you have any questions! I'm happy to help.
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Whoops, my brain went blank. I'll be sure to ask a specific question.
Would it be alright if I added another comment? So sorry.
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I just recently started doing painting in photoshop. I’m a bit new to the brushes and for this particular piece mainly used the smudge tool after blocking in the basic colors. I think it turned out ok, but it could definitely be better. Does anyone have any brush or shading/painting tips?
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I'm concerned about the quality of this short fan fiction. Like; do I overly repeat words? Is there somewhere I can cut back on word usage? Is there lack of clarity in details? Is there anything I should include? Please give me feedback to make this fanfic better. It's for a friend and I want it to be the best it can.
Star Fox: Kursed Heartaches, Entry #1Log 1:
My name is Enness. I'm a lone warrior traveling through space searching for, and fighting for, the truth.
My most recent journey was in the Lylat system. I remember hearing about the tragic story of the Star Fox team. Specifically, how their leader, Fox McCloud, had lost any relationship of his girlfriend, Krystal. It's a tale so tragic, it brings great pain to my heart whenever it enters my mind. It's not sorrow, but actual, physical aching in its upper chambers. As a result, it makes it harder for me to fight. My accuracy is wavering, and my muscles don't tense up as much when I use my double Naginata. I've made it my goal to resolve this problem on both sides. It's not like me to bother with other people's problems like this, but it's not like me to permit it to screw up my fighting skills. No matter how many times I push it away, it always comes back. Lately, it's been getting worse. As I follow the truth, I can only feel ease about a problem knowing it's been
Star Fox: Kursed Heartaches, Entry #2Log 2:
My name is Enness. I'm a lone warrior traveling through space searching for, and fighting for, the truth.
I've met with Krystal. I know she despises that old name, but it's either that or allow the influence of her past to bring me away from the truth.
Anyways, I don't want her to learn my plan, so I plan to keep my encounters with her brief. So far, I've encountered her once. All I said was, "You seem frustrated. Why are you letting it ruin your life?'"
I'm guessing she knows my plan now. Even with the tinfoil trim I put in my hat, I'm sure she knows.
I'm such an idiot to act like that without thinking first.
The heartaches haven't gotten worse, but it won't go away. I've tried everything to shake it. I even looked to a therapist for help, and their best suggestions were for naught.
But I won't give up. I've never given up on anything before, and I refuse to start now. Even if I have to swallow my pride, I'm seeing this through t
Star Fox: Kursed Heartaches, Entry #3Log 3:
My name is Enness. I'm a lone warrior traveling through space searching for, and fighting for, the truth.
I'm still trying to solve Krystal's problems. The heartaches are getting worse. I've tried thinking of a way. With her telepathy allowing her to sense me, I can't get close to spy on her. I had no choice but to return to the Lylat system. I spied on members of Star Fox. I failed to find any useful information. I can't tell which is worse, the worsening heartaches, or the fact that I'm truly useless to the poor blue vixen.
Fortunately, I've thought of a plan. It's extreme, but I have no other options at hand. The pains in my heart are getting bad. Last week, it made me drop one of my guns during battle. I'm going to swallow my pride and bet my future as a warrior on this extreme measure.
Star Fox: Kursed Heartaches, Entry #4Log 4:
My name is Enness. I'm a lone warrior traveling through space searching for, and fighting for, the truth.
I found Fox McCloud. He and Krystal encountered each other here on planet Kew. Krystal recognized him, but that fool of a Fox sure didn't recognize her. Instantly, my heart ached so much, I nearly yelled in deep pain, both emotionally and physically. In fact, it was so painful, I literally contacted Fox sometime after that, and I told him... certain things.
My heartaches are slowly getting worse. I checked with a doctor, and he suggested I take it easy and avoid overworking my heart. But how can I in a situation like this?
Star Fox: Kursed Heartaches, Entry #5Log 5:
My name is Enness. I'm a lone warrior traveling through space searching for, and fighting for, the truth.
I have no choice. A year has passed since my last entry. I've managed to make make something that might just revive Krystal's true self. I won't say what it is, as I fear someone reading this entry would tell Krystal, and ruin my plan.
My heart aches are so bad, people around me have begun to think I have a heart condition. I haven't picked a single fight in 6 months. I fear my condition may get so severe, I might end up suffering heart failure. Dying from a scared heart, both emotional and physical pains dealing the final blow, I can't think of a worse way to go.
I've already given Krystal a transmitter and contacted her. She's going to meet me at a nearby cliff tomorrow at (*;
Sorry. I had another heartache. My fingers slipped.
Anyways, Krystal will be meeting me at the cliff around 6:00 PM tomorrow. This is my last chance. If this
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I have 3 more. I'm limited to 5 thumbnails per comment, so here are the remaining 3.
Star Fox: Kursed Heartaches, Entry #6Log 6:
My name is Enness. I'm a lone warrior traveling through space searching for, and fighting for, the truth.
I met with Krystal. She found me on the cliff, just like I asked her to, and at 6:00 PM sharp, I might add. It was raining, with the flashes of thunder echoing throughout the skies.
I tossed her the thing I mentioned in the last entry.
The thing I mentioned last entry is the dead body of Fox McCloud. Like I said, the idea was extreme. I had no choice. This is all I could think of.
They say that your true self is revealed in the face of death. I knew that with her pain, her death wouldn't change a thing. So I had an idea, what if it was facing someone else's death?
I also told Krystal why Fox forced her off the team. It was for her own protection, after their mission with the Aparoids. I told her that her frustration with Fox dumping her blinded her, and made her take a bad path.
She realized it. She understood the truth. I cou
Star Fox: Kursed Heartaches, Entry #7Log 7:
My name is Enness. I'm a lone warrior traveling through space searching for, and fighting for, the truth.
It's been a month since that twisted meeting with Krystal. I found Krystal in the same spot. She was mourning the loss of Fox. Also, she had dug a grave for him, burried him, and even set up a tombstone.
But then, a miracle struck her.
Fox McCloud appeared behind her, living, breathing, and above ground. It was hard for her to wrap her psychic head around. Fortunately, my plan seemed to be working. She was crying for Fox. She wasn't calling herself Kursed. Her true self was revived.
Just as I told him to say, Fox informed that forcing her off the team was for her own protection. He didn't want to lose her. In fact, as the scene unfolded before me, fox fell to his knees in tears. I told him about all the pain he caused her, and it got to him perfectly. The sorrowful Fox made this appeal to the blue vixen perfectly.
Without them notici
Star Fox: Kursed Heartaches, Entry #8Log 8:
My name is Enness. I'm a lone warrior traveling through space searching for, and fighting for, the truth.
It's been two weeks since Fox and Krystal made up. They returned to the Lylat system, and Krystal rejoined Star Fox. Coincidentally, so much chaos happened after their reunion, and Krystal's actions in response to these chaotic events were recognized enough for the Lylat system to forgive her. Even though the blame she had before wasn't her fault, the force keeping her from returning to Lylat was neutralized.
About a week after their reunion, that's when I appeared, informing them of my whole plan.
Truth is, I only made a fake body of Fox. I made it myself. I made a successful copy of the body, down to the last square inch of skin, and last drop of blood. Even the heart was set up perfectly. Don't ask me how I copied the lower end of the digestive system. It's too disturbing to bring up. But at least it's not that tragic story that causes me heart
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So I'm starting to draw centaurs with this pic and I was wondering two things:
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A) If my hooves are done well (I'm not really aiming for realistic but still want them to be interesting)
B) if anyone got any tips for drawing that unicorn tail with the shaggy hair ( the one that goes up the tail, not the Lion one she has now).
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Hi there!
Centaurs are cool ^_^
A) I think you could look into the shape from cartoon references, to show how the leg narrows above the hoof and overall the leg shape. It can be done even in simplistic drawings. Here's a couple of examples with small and simple legs that nevertheless have some horse-like shape.
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I suggest you look for cartoon that you like the most - mlp, disney - and trace the leg shape a few times so that you understand the principle. The best idea is to look at real horse anatomy explanations of course 
B) add a wavy hair line alongside the tail maybe? If I get your idea correctly.
And hey, it's not among your questions, but I just noticed you have a very strange way of drawing mouths, far away on the cheek. Maybe that's your style, but I think it gives the faces a strange shape that doesn't work well... 
I made a tracing over your image, that shows how I would draw legs and hooves, the tail, and the way I would alter the face proportions.
Hope this will help, or at least give you some ideas how you could improve
Good luck with the character development!
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Hello!
If you would like an answer, please include a specific question. Example questions are:
- I know something is wrong with the chin of the person I'm painting, but I don't know what it is exactly and how to fix it?
- I finished this piece, but now I'm not sure about the colours. Can someone tell me if they work together?
- I don’t think the composition of my photograph is quite right. Is there a way I can crop it to improve it?
On the other hand, if you'd like more general feedback, you may be more interested in submitting to our gallery (requires constructive commenting) or our favourites (no comments required).
Let me know if you have any questions! I'm happy to help.
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fav.me/dddpfzr I think this drawing will be better with shading. Can someone share me advice about shading and how to use Deviantart Muro a little more?
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If you're new to shading, try some practice exercises.
On a plain table top, place a ball, a block, and a bottle/can on it. Use a lamp or something as a single source of light in the room.
Note the shadows on the table top as related to the light. Note where the shadows start on the object surfaces. Balls will have a curved shadow edge, cylinders will have straight edges. Blocks will be all or nothing depending on the surface position related to the light position.
Move the light and objects, and study again. Lather, rinse, repeat. Then try dolls, folded cloth, rumpled towels, etc. Add another light. And so on.
Have fun!
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Okay. Thanks for the advice
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i personally don't use da muro. when shading you need a light source to tell where the dark part is and where the light part is.usually the shade goes in the opposite direction of where the direction of the light is coming from
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it is a little old, but I just want to get people's opinions on what they think of it, if that is ok?
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I think it's quite a decent drawing. The design looks stylish and you work well with lines, varying thickness to highlight large shapes. And the texture details look nice.
The lines themselves look kinda rough, but it can as well be a part of style. But maybe it would look even more cool if it was polished. Still, it's a stylish image, that resembles a tattoo design. It could make a cool decorative engraving too.
Have to add, that as it is now, it's hard to tell what exactly is drawn here, it's more like an abstract composition of tentacles/sea objects and a woman's face. I would call this symbolism maybe, or surrealism.
Looking at description, that's an octopus, but it wasn't too clear to me until I read it. Maybe it's just my impression, because the woman's face drew my attention to itself and I missed the octopus' eyes
This is only a quick reply though
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ah ok, thanks so much on your feedback!
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I need some advise about my prise list.
There were those who saved it, but no one wrote to me or even commented on it. What does this mean and why is this happening?
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Commissions can be difficult because there are a lot of reasons why people choose to make a purchase or not, and some of those reasons have nothing to do with what you are offering. One reason people save commission deviations is maybe they can't afford one right now but want to save it for the future when they have the money. Some people might have saved yours because they like the way you formatted it and want to reference it in the future when they open commissions.
A couple of things I might suggest is checking your spelling (ie prise price) and removing the lined art style option instead of asking people not to buy it. Incorrect spelling can come across as unprofessional and like you didn't put much care into presenting your commissions, and if it looks like you don't care, people will believe you'll put the same lack of care into their commission. Clients want to believe they made a good choice and gave their money to someone who cares about presentation and will provide them with a quality product. It's also better to offer what you want to do than be stuck with a commission that frustrates you or piles on unnecessary stress, so it's better to remove the options you don't want to do from the beginning. I hope that helps. Good luck with your commissions ♥
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For the background of this I tried to go for a greyscale-Colourful background thing but it drowned out the characters too much so I had to blurt it slightly and add effects behind the characters. Is there a way to make the background less prominent without blurring it or desaturating the colours?
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Hmm maybe.. I'll have to try that next time
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I'd really like some feedback on the skin color as well as the composition. Human skin tones are really difficult for me to get right, I always have too much yellow in there and when I throw in some more red it looks wrong to me.
How can I improve the skin color? And how is the composition balance and how can I improve that?
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For white/Caucasian I usually use orange, but drawn or painted on very lightly.
For Black I use dark brown like the one above.
For South Asian (Pakistan, India, etc.) I use dark brown but painted lightly.
For Oriental - Chinese, Japanese, Korean - I use ochre, painted strongly or lightly.
Hope this helps
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I had only 20 minutes to draw this New Zealand flax, www.rhs.org.uk/Plants/12791/Ph…
If I had more time, what could I draw better? apart from making the green leaves darker.
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You could add highlights to boot the contrast
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Try making the green leaves darker, yes, but also make them more prominent and detail each one so they don’t all blend together and look like mush
also so make the little red things, whatever they are, have some more volume so they don’t look flat. I looked up the plant and the shape is 100% on point, but try to work on them being more prominent too
but other than that I loveloveLOVE it
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Yes definitely, thank you!
That was friendly shorthand
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Yay
normally I’m useless
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Hi! I was hoping to get some feedback on the colors I used in this and some ideas on how to make the subjects stand out a little more. It’s too dark, but I feel like making it lighter would upset the mood?
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Hello, my opinion about your work would be that maybe you need to create a more striking atmosphere between the foreground and background, for example: smoke with red light glares that drive away the contrast of the foreground character.
Preo I think that in general it is very good, it only lacks a little shade of light.
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ooh yeah! some highlights on the smoke would've been a great idea! Thank you!
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I really like the colors, the skin tone matches the background. What I would say needs improvement is actually adding more red for the lighting. The color is very nice right now as a base, but that is some strong red lighting in the setting. Throw that on her body to place her inside the place she is standing
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Ah thank you so much! This is a big help!
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I think, maybe use a lot of green in the figure.
That's the complementary colour of red, so that would make it stand out.
Hope this helps
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Hi! No way, you should be really proud of this piece- it's amazing. The haze behind her - which I assume is Darth Vader, but I'm sorry if I'm wrong - is SO good. That with the facial expression Ahsoka has makes it look like there's eminent danger behind her and she knows it. Creepy. If you really want to make it pop, or "increase the dramatic effect" then I would actually suggest going darker with the shadows.
I see the red rim around the left side of her body. I would suggest giving it a bit more of a "glow" however. It would spread over a bit to the front of her body instead of just her back and stopping abruptly. 
I was really bored today so I made a little thing for you. Hope it helps. It is honestly a beautiful piece. Congrats!
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Ah thank you so much! I really appreciate your advice and the diagram you drew! It helped a bunch!
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You're welcome! I'm glad I could help!
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Hello! I'd love to hear what you guys thing about this and what should I improve.
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There’s a lot of motion in this piece, which really adds to the intensity! The outward motion of the arms as well as of the dark lines work well! I’d recommend continuing that motion through the characters waist, having him sort of lean into the piece to give a sense of direction. He’s standing a little too straight at the legs for the motion to feel perfectly natural. You have great ideas here! Hope this helps!
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I'm looking for feedback on the composition here.
I'm making an adventure game poster and I want to know if the character positioning is working or if anything else would work better in the image composition-wise. I gave the main character/the playable character the most visual room, but the villain is bigger to kind of show off how he's a threat. The other two villains are more of a background type and show up less in the game. Is there a way I can improve this composition or is it working well as it is?
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Hi!
Speaking about meaning of the composition, maybe you could try to alter the main villain's pose or placement. I think right now he looks like he's standing by the hero's back, making them a sort of a single unit. More so than the main hero/second hero, because second hero's smaller and the pose faces different way.
If you want to show the looming intimidating presense, maybe you can make the villain even bigger, and move higher up and separate them distinctively with coloring and shades, because now it's more like a secret villain who pretends to be a friend standing behind hero's shoulder. Maybe you can reduce the villain to a practically "flying face" in the background with everything below shoulders losing in the dark.
Alternatively, you may change facing direction for one of them. Make it 3/4 for the hero, facing the second hero. Or make the villain into side view.
Speaking of the image as a whole, you should probably give it more space above and on the left side (if this is the final setup), because now everything is a bit too squeezed, and shifted towards top/left. 5-10% more free space in the image may make the whole group stand out more. Try to check yourself by the 'rule of thirds' to make it so that the hero's face gets into one of those crossing focus points (look it up, it's a good practice for quick balancing of composition).
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This is very helpful especially the spacing comment, thanks I'll definitely take all of this intro consideration when I go to edit the thumbnail!
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