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i think the size and position of the main villain is good, if the two heroes are supposed to work together then I think you might want to change either his pose to look more in her direction or her pose maybe so they stand back to back and look ready for action (just what came to my mind to make them look more like a team) if their not supossed to be a team it's seems fine as it is to me.
The minor villains look like their in a meeting, their poses don't look mischievous or threatening but they might as well look like they're planning something. Also by looking at it I'd move the two a bit to the right, but that's just a feeling.
i hope my feedback is helpful
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I made this for the Warm Vibes contest a while back and I wanted to know: What does this make you feel?
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It's nostalgic and makes me think of childhood play. It makes me feel excited with a desire for fun. I think it totally fits the theme.
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Thanks. That's exactly what I was going for.
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Here is my first attempt at a digital painting of Genji. I still have a lot to learn with painting and I struggled most with the chest metal armor plating. I have never painted metal before, so I'm curious if it looks like metal to everyone else? Any other tips on making this piece pop more either through composition or colors/changing the bg? Thanks!!
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Hand looks like metal but the rest needs more of the "shiny" aspect. For the character to pop more try darkening the background more
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Question:
What if it's literature other than poetry or prose?
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That's fine as long as it's under 400 words.
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Oh crap.
My fanfiction probably won't be under 400 words.
I guess I won't be giving people something to comment on in this case. I'm a bit of a "type-o-holic," as it were.
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You could try and see if you get any bites.
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That's going to be a problem. You see, even with the format I'm trying, even that might not be enough. This bait is too large to put in the water without sinking to the bottom, falling right off the line.
But it I suppose if I have an episode under 400 words, I could give it a shot on its own.
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That sounds like a more dedicated project for someone, like a beta reader.
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i want to start making a pilot episode for a series i'm making with these characters the imagimons and i don't know how or where to start, any ideas
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Childhood friends and the characters they created for themselves for the games they play together. Childhood live roleplaying
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From what I've read of these four, I think a decent plot episode would be something like this:
The world is being taken over by the Overlord (I don't know if you've decided on a name for him, but I'm just sticking with Overlord) and his space army. The armies of Earth are putting up a decent fight, but they are fighting a losing battle. There are some places on Earth where humans live somewhat peacefully. It is here that four children (ranging from 11-9) are playing and they stumble upon a field of weird glowing lights. While they are playing they being to imagine some creatures battling it out.
Soon enough, the creatures they imagined start to become more real as time goes on until they are actually there in real life! The children are amazed by the creatures and ask what they are. The red one gives a snarky remark along the lines of "You should know. You're the ones who thought us up." Before getting smacked on the head by the green one telling him to be nice. The four explain what they are, but they don't know exactly what they are there for.
The home of the children is being attacked by some of the Overlord's minions and the children and Imagimons rush in and battle against the army. They manage to defeat the standard enemies easily before they get to the leader of the group. The leader is too strong for the Imagimon to defeat individually. So at this point they could either work together as a team to defeat them or one of the them could have their respective child imagine something for them to use in order to win.
The former of the two options is pretty easy as it doesn't need much to explain. As the expression goes, "Teamwork makes the dream work". However, the second option would need to be explained later on as there could be a plot whole early on as to "Why don't the kids just imagine something that will stop the Overlord from the beginning?" So maybe go along the lines of 'You need a specific amount of the mysterious energy to create something from your imagination. Something like a sword would use up a small amount of energy while a huge dragon with laser eyes and indestructible scales would take a monstrous amount of energy to create.' It doesn't have to be explained in the plot episode, but it will have to be addressed later.
At any point, they children and Imagimons win the battle. They celebrate their victory as the children being to think about the help that they could give to people around the world. Maybe even have more people create their own Imagimon The episode ends on the Overlord getting news that a troop of his has been defeated by Imagimon. He brushes it off as a few Imagimon won't stop him from finishing his 'trial run' and once he's done with Earth, the rest of the galaxy is next. He laughs and there is a 'To be continued' at the bottom.
That is my take on a plot episode. It has action, a world that seems interesting, as well as establish somewhat the villains can do and who they are. Now you can do some entirely different. For example, have the plot episode be of with a Slice of Life with no war going on and instead have the children meet the Imagimon normally and they just have fun throughout the whole episode and have it end off with the Overlord's ships loom over the planet, preparing to strike. Either way, I like the designs of these guys. They have a Saturday morning cartoon vibe to them.
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i love this pilot episode ideas, so awesome! these are some of the changes i would make
the story could being with a young cartoonist (let's say about 10) who's struggling to make a cartoon and the part where the overlord attacks earth was in his imagination as he wakes up from dozing off as a result of working late at night. at one point he dozes off again in front his computer with the picture of the imagimons on the screen when the title of the series appears below them. suddenly a stream of mysterious magical energy flows from the cartoonist's head and into the computer causing the screen to glow brighter until the imagimons suddenly pop out of the computer and crashes in the young cartoonist knocking him out cold.
recovering from their surprise entrance they look around the kid's room where at certain point aquachip(the mouse/squirrel guy) finds a picture of them with their names. after looking around room and examining the cartoonist's pictures and drawing ectoflare(the grey dragon guy) claims that they were brought this world to be what believes "the super adventures". the four friends agree to this idea and they exit out throught the window to being their adventure to wherever the way take them.
as the imagimons embark in their first adventure the young cartoonist wakes ups wondering it was all a dream but soon sees his computer screen is blank and hears sound from his window. he looks out the window and sees what he believes are the very characters he drew on his computer and knowing that he probably released random cartoon creature into the real world he get a sick feeling that something bad is going to happen. the episode plays on with the imagimons exploring the city wondering how to start their adventure where plantrella (the girl in green) asks where their first stop will be and ectoflare says something like "beats me, i don't know anything about this world".
plantrella face palms and was about to say something until something catches her attention. a secret agent looking man is seen carrying a cage with some kind of creature thats trying to escape. angered by seeing a innocent creature being taken against their will plantrella runs towards the man kicks in him leg causing him to drop the cage and releasing the creature. noticing this the man tried to chased it but plantrella grabbed his saying "oh no you don't you leave that poor creature alone!" at first the looked at her in frustration but then picks her up examining her and says "hmm, you might make a good replacement" and puts her over his shoulder as she yells at him demanding him to let her go.
hearing plantrella's cries for help ectoflare stops aquachip and zapluse(the robot guy) and finds plantrella carry away by the secret agent man as zapulse shouts "hey what you doing with our friend let her go!" the man waves a hand and says "sorry kids, but i got a job to do and don't play make believe" suddenly a bone comes out of nowhere and hits the man on head knocking him over and dropping plantrella where zapulse catches her. the bone comes back and ectoflare catches saying "bet you don't play dodgeball either" plantrella hugs zapulse thanking him for catching her and zapulse blushes as the man gets up trying to swing a fist a them. aquachip notices this throws his hands up shouting "look out!" as a nearby fire hydrant shoots a blast of water at the man knocking him backwards.
by the time plantrella and zapulse notices the man was gone. zapulse amazed by of aquachip did says "how in the world did you do that?" aquachip says he's not sure how claiming that he just thought about and it just happen. hearing this ectoflare pointed out that kinda did the same thing with the bond he threw where plantrella steps in saying that maybe it has something to with the mysterious man. aquachip wonder if they'll run into that man again where ectoflare puts his arm on aquachip's shoulder saying that there's low chances that it will happen not after the way they toke him down
plantrella sighs at their sudden carelessness as zapulse puts his hand on her hand saying that he'll make sure nothing bad will happen to her and she thanks him. with their roadblock taken care of the imagimons get back to their adventure where aquachip and ectoflare five high after coming up with a team name "the imagimons" as plantrella and zapulse are holding hands. the episode ends the secret agent man taking to the overlord that the operation has been derailed by creatures called imagimons. the overlord brushes this off as a few Imagimons won't stop him from conquering the galaxy and tells him to get back to work. the overlord hangs up and pulls hologram earth and says "starting with the milky way galaxy" as the words To Be Continued appear at the bottom
note: i meant to say pilot episode, sorry for any confusions
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First of all, hello everyone! That is a lot of time that I don't post here, but here we go:
There is a lot of time that I am just doing woman draws (don't know why, since in the past I used to draw more men, but...) And this is my "first" attempt after months, and I wanted your opinion about anatomy, if it's good, what I need to improve, and maybe the background, because I was without ideas on doing something, I just wanted to draw a portrait for training, but I always think that a background is essencial.
I thank everyone in advance!
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I think the overall anatimy looks good, on second glance his neck looks a bit off: he's twisting his head to the left but his neck dosn't look twisted, and his left arm seems to morph into his chest a little bit, I think this could be fixed by making his left forearm just a bit longer
as for background, he has wounds but he's smiling so I'd think he's either the winner on a battle field or maybe fighting with a rival.
I hope I could help
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huuum, I see. Yeah the neck I just noticed now, I think I need to do some marks to show that his neck was twisting...
And for his chest I think I put more shadows than should be, that is why looks like it's morphing lol
Yeah, that background is a really good idea! Will remade him after that!
Thanks for the feedback, really helped me!
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I'm always glad when I can help ^^
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Hello! I've been trying to get into art more frequently, and this is a drawing I've done traditionally, then colored digitally. I am trying to start out with loose sketches then line over digitally, but this was when I inked it over first then scanned and colored digitally. My art program is paint.net, and I was simply wanting to see if there was anything that can be added over to make the art look...better. If anyone has any tips that is
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Nice work and a good start to digital painting! I use GIMP, and at first a lot of my time was just learning how to use the many features. A quick YouTube search for Paint.net came up with dozens of tutorials specifically for your program. Jump in anywhere with those and give it a go. As long as your pencil work gets you set up to something nice, then you can scan, trace, modify, and paint to your heart's content.
As the old saying goes - practice, practice, practice! Good luck and have fun!
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thank you! I tried GIMP and FireAlpaca, but Paint.net is the best one I've used. I'm hoping things will get better for me. and again thank you!
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When you say "background" do you mean a fully illustrated scene, or just something that is not flat white everywhere? If you're wanting the former, atomicsnarl offered some nice ideas. If it's the latter and you just want something less bland than a solid white background, I'd suggest checking out the works of rachaelm5 , and looking at how she does backgrounds for her riotously colourful dragons.
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Beautiful dragon and work! Since you've got such detail and cool shades for your palette, how about a nice warm twilight sunset background. The dragon will stand out and forward with a bland-ish background of say, sunset trees: www.bing.com/images/search?q=s…
or forest sunset: www.bing.com/images/search?q=F…
Either of those themes could be simplified to contrast the dragon detail.
Bing Images is your friend -- hope this helps!
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Mature Content
This is a mature woman, not a young girl.
And she is meant to look real, not a supermodel.
Still, there might be things I could have done better, as regards body proportions and colour?
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Good stuff! Your style is your style, and I'm not going to grump about how I would have done it, but focus on tweaking the way you've done things.
Colors - Love the desert pastel palette. The green offsets the dominant tan, but there's not enough of it to make the warm/cool balance. The browns help break it up, but it's very warm dominant. Did you want to have an offset cool spot, or was the green intended as a fill rather than a balance? Decisions, decisions.
Posture - Are her hips twisted away (far butt cheek reveal) but not obscuring the pubic hair? If so, this makes for an odd upper body shoulder twist -- almost the "Broke Back" comic book posture. The illiac crest is in a good position for the rotated hips, but the stomach line is sideways right up to the arm, then it's chest/shoulder rotation toward view. There's not a blend between lower and upper body - she pivots entirely and only at the mid rib cage. The tummy paunch and full breasts are just fine.
Head - Stylized face in 3/4 view, but mouth seems to be stuck on flat. Would you break style by rounding the far side lips toward profile a bit? It's kind of the Egyptian Eyes problem, only with lips. The cheek bulge is a style artifact and works well with your nose and eyes. The mouth just doesn't fit right for me.
The head behind - Who is this and what are they doing there? Is this a composition issue, related to other images in this as a series? The body is hidden for a reason? It's a good face, just a mystery.
Overall - Good choices for contrast edges and definition. Layout good as well with some minor structural issues about palette. Increasing some of the body shadowing would help on the arm as you did for the breast and under-breast.
Hope this helps address some of what you were seeking. Have fun!
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Thank you very much for the comprehensive and useful feedback
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Hi! I'm acutally planning on moving to Instagram but the help from this group IS SUCH A BLESSING
I'm making a thumbnail for an oil painting I'm doing buuuut I'm having trouble with angling/composition (sorry for the messy sketches)
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The first one was my original idea, but it felt like it was too simple of composition. Then I tried the second one with a different angle, but then I felt like the emphasis of the mirror wasn't there (and what I wanted)
Any help or thoughts? Any help is greatly appericatiated!
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I do like the focus of the fist one especially with the focus on the mirror. The second feels less "intimate" with the mirror because it feels like your splitting the focus between the character and the reflection. #1 is simple but simple isn't always bad, it all depends on the effect you want to create.
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Pretty cool. The second one needs more colour I think and should be less outlines of colour in the background
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Where and what is your focus of the composition? You mention emphasizing the mirror - in what way?
First, consider your lines of action: LinesOfAction They will draw the eye toward your focus.
Second, consider the perspective opportunities provided by the mirror. You have not only the two (mirrored) characters to pose and the foreground, but now also the background in the mirror can reveal or accent features as well.
Note that lines of action don't have to be curves. You can use a perspective edge to guide the eye as well. Perhaps the mirror edge does this, or a doorway frame in the mirror.
Using a mirror where you don't want the person obscuring the view of themselves in the mirror pretty much demands at least 2 point perspective, and it's an easy step to 3PP.
I took your right image and modified it in Stash here: Raeilia Mod
By leaning the character forward a bit and adding a flower to the middle, there are now two LOA sets - one toward the mirror face, and one toward the other face. You could further emphasize the mirror face by sweeping curves in the hair toward and forward on top of the head. Note also having the eyes level with each other (defining the viewers eye line), but having the mirror head top lower and shoulder higher than the source. This introduces 2PP with a vanishing point far left of the image.
Hope this gives you something more to work with on your layout! Also - first time using Muro. Wheee!
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Thank you so much with this, it makes a lot more sense now.
Perspective has always given me issues but your description helps so much.
Thank you again!
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Hi 
Not a full critique, but a couple things that stick out to me:
- the wing colors look kinda muffled, "dirty". I'm unsure about the green hue too, it sticks out from the rest of palette. If you want a complimentary color palettes, to match cyan-blue-magenta you will need yellow/orange hue (one opposite to middle of this trio, which is blue). If you want to use all close colors, then either red or green will have to go.
- the gray eyeballs are perhaps too dark. And the far eye would look better if it was shaded on the left/top-left, not on the top.
Once you have a good palette (either complimentary, or close hues) you can pick what to use for clothes and wings from there. Good idea is to make some hues bright and some dark, so that in grayscale they will be separated by value. Muffled, low saturated hues don't go well wiyh pony style, which you follow closely when drawing her face and body.
I have to note that the design itself is a worthy one, character is recognizable as Twilight, but it's definitely a fairy. The shoe buttons shaped after her cutiemark make a nice detail
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It just struck me that the wings look as they look because you make them transparent against a black background 
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Oh this does look much better! The white background certainly works well. And the wings are just the right kind of transparent now, they look colorful indeed.
I still don't fully agree with the color palette here
P.S. ouch, I've noticed a white line on her wing, crossing the red stripe... You should probably check this place
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Welcome! I know the value of a fresh look at pictures too
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I need help in finding out what i could improve with this piece! i feel like something is up with how i drew the face :00
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Allowing that it is a fairly standard cat, the eye position is below the bridge of the nose, and the nose is tilted toward the viewer. The pose is 3/4 face, so the far side of the nose should be obscured with the teeth pulled back to match. The ear opening is matching the eye, but the eye is too low, so both need to be higher on the skull.
Consider this collection of 3/4 view cat heads: www.bing.com/images/search?q=c…
You're on to something good here, just need some more anatomy work. Have fun!
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Mature Content
These ladies are not meant to be supermodels, but look real.
Still, what could I do better next time in terms of body shape and posture?
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The lower leg of the woman on the left looks a bit short... and the butt cheeks of the woman on the right seem to overlap (the right one being more in the foreground) even though we're looking at her directly from behind. Apart from that it looks fine to me.
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I'm kinda undecided whether the lupines (the bigger flowers on the ground) fit into the picture at all. Their round shapes seem to clash with the pointiness of the other elements but if I remove them, the ground looks too empty. Should I replace them with pointier plants? Or do they look fine?
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Maybe what's wrong is not the shape of the flowers, but their size and positioning? To me, it feels like they are kinda tiny (looking at those that apparently are next to the man on the left side), also I've a feeling that the man's feet go below ground level (looking at the area where you merge him into ground).
So, maybe what you need to do is pick some flowery image that would overlay the place where his feet are and put it on the right height compared to him (real lupines, as much as I recall them, can go knee-high, or even higher, and seem pretty volumous).
Here, a couple refs:
mysweetphoto.com/wp-content/up…
serenko.com.ua/images/lupins_0…
Hope this helps!
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