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Abelzumi [2017-08-12 23:19:34 +0000 UTC]

Overall

Vision

Originality

Technique

Impact

The environment envisioned here appears to be both a harsh world, but one that can support life as well. Plants as rugged as the rocks around them sprout across the landscape, harsh survivors of the volcanic wastes. An apex predator, the dragon prepares to launch a white-hot ball of flame at its fleeing prey, the fleet-of-foot mountain goat. Overall, each individual aspect of the world is presented in a manner reminiscent that gives them life.

The staggering of the pieces and the overall composition feels confusing to me. I have difficulty determining exactly where the dragon and goat are compared to the foreground, as well as the rocks that the dragon appears to be crushing underneath its feet. If the focus was on the environment itself, then the places where the volcano flow and the foreground intersect would not be limited by the positioning of the chase. If the focus on was on the chase, then a closer framing and a path of action would have taken precedent over the landscape as a whole.

Essentially, by trying to convey both the world and the action, both of them lost their overall impact. Each of them individually has strength, but together, they detract from each other's final appearance. If you are revising, I suggest that you separate these pieces so that the vibrant nature of your art can appear to the viewer as having its own focus: one for the chase, and one for the world. There's something amazing to be made with tighter focus and the same mastery that you present in each aspect of "Fire Environment."

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