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ryuzo — Transformers Fanfic 1 - part 1
Published: 2007-11-13 14:10:57 +0000 UTC; Views: 7358; Favourites: 116; Downloads: 124
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This is my first attempt at a TF comic. It is a birthday present for my brother. Happy bday! It stars all of his favorite characters.This marks the first time (I think) that me and my bros have collaborated on a project. Hopefully this will be the first of many to come.
In panel 3, Hound's screen has "Ancient Autobot" on it, which is a font by Jim Sorenson. He based it on the Monolith that appeared in the TV episode Cosmic Rust. Thanks Jim!
View the original sketches for part 1 here [link]
Then check out the continuation here!
Part 2 [link]
Part 3 [link]
Part 4 [link]
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I appreciate the compliments! I really worked hard on it.
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ditto the above comment. the transformation scenes especially look astounding. <3
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Thank you! The double-edged sword of something so refined is that I get so burned out. I've been searching for a quicker art style for soooo long. Art came a bit easy to me, but the motivation and mental fortitude did not. Luckily, I feel I am getting stronger in my mind to create longer stories and not get burned out. Wish me luck!
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oof, I hear ya there. The worst part about trying to actually create something you can really be proud of is how much it actually takes to keep at it :') I myself tend to be most comfortable in quick sketches, as with my ADHD it allows me to be able to switch my focus from one to the next quite quickly. I can pound out a couple pages of sketches at a time, but ask me to sit down and try to really complete something and I can hardly work on it for more than fifteen minutes at a time.
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yes you did, and it looks awesome
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Wow, the art style is great! And the mid-transformations are awesome.
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Thanks for the favs! Yes, the art style is something I think comes naturally to me, so thanks! And the mid-transformations were fun to think of...that's what TFs are all about!
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Thanks for the favs of parts 1-4! And thanks for looking at the sketches, they are what led to this finished product!
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this is just too amazing for words O_O
I luv the sense of motion. very well done.
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Thanks for the fav and comment on the motion! Motion was definitely a central theme in this fanfic. Thanks again!
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Thanks, the shading is what tires my hand the most, but it also leads to the best results.
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Hehe, here's the dialogue I promised...whew, it's long
p1: Sunstreaker: I'm so BORED Magnus! We've been driving for hours and my wheels are tired!
Sideswipe: then ya should have stayed at the Ark, whiney bot. Oh wait, I remember why you came! You got all mad cuz Grimlock beat you at checkers!
Sunstreaker: he stomped on the board and said I cheated...*hiss hiss*
Magnus: >< stfu pls I can't deal with that now...
p2: Hound: Hey, you hear something?
Smokescreen: Oops, sorry.
Magnus: -_-
Hound: No...it's coming from above us...
p3: Hound: Frag it!! O.O
p4: Thrust: haha Got the Jeep in the butt!!
Smokescreen: Ack! *falls out of vehicle mode*
p5: Magnus: Prepare for battle!
Sunstreaker: wheehoo action!
Sideswipe: ^_^
Smokescreen: OMGWTF Hound, you ok?
Hound: ><
p6: Sideswipe: take this!! DIE!! bwahaha
Thundercracker: Neener neener (wiggles his thrusters)
p7: Sunstreaker: I think we scared em off.
Magnus: no, they're coming back to finish us...
Sideswipe: I'm ready for another round. I'm just getting warmed up!
p8: Thrust: I call the yellow one!
THundercracker: aw, I wanted that one...
Thrust: that's ok. I can share.
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Cool dialogue!! If you want, I can put in the dialogue and you can post my comic on your devpage!
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ooooh that'd be cool! 
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Ok, I'll put the text on part 1 and send it to you. Then post it on your page! Please link to me as well!
Then go ahead and script part 2 and send it to me. Part 3 will be finished in mid-February.
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of course I will!! that would be great!!
I'll go ahead and post the script on the second part. Hope you like it! ^^ can't wait for part 3!
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Poor Hound.. lol
I love how everyone's transforming around him and he's sort of lying on the ground
Great stuff, I love your drawing style
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Thanks for the fav! And yes, poor Hound...when my bro suggested the idea, for some reason, he picked out Hound to get thrashed!! lol
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love panels 6 and 7... 6 for the mechanical details; 7 for the motion lines and viewpoint
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Mayhaps you mean other panels? There are no motion lines in panel 7...
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Yeah it's great to hear exactly which panels people like, usually they are different!
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Holy cow! I have no interest in transformers and cars, but this is so freaking amazing! Can't get around it, gotta love it!
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Thanks for the fav and I'm so glad you like it! Part 2 coming soon...
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How long did it took actually? Seems very very hard to me.
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Man it took ages...perhaps 2 to 4 hours per panel.
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Thanks for the compliment and fav!
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Your welcomes! The art is awsome. If I didn't already say that in the first comment
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Some gr8 tasty mech-mousse
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Woah hey great to see ya! Thanks for the fav and comment! Part 2 is coming whether you're ready or not, hehe!
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Bring it on
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Wow, this turned out really nice. I'm looking forward to the rest of it.
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Hey if that's your last name, we have the same last name!
Thanks for commenting, see you in part 2.
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Wow this is pretty amazing. Great job! 
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Thanks for the fav!
Yes it took a while...but it's really worth it seeing all these comments and favs! Hope you stick around for part 2 and 3!
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Hooray! Good to see the TF stuff you've been talking about.
Nice painting job! I'd like to see the edges sharpen up a bit, but I know how difficult that is... I've got the same issues when I try to paint in PS. Good contrast and form, though.
Overall, it's strong and I'm looking forward to seeing more. I like the silhouette of... Megatron, perhaps? Out in the distance. Transformation sequence looks great.
It almost feels like everything's a bit on the thin side, though... as if the page had been stretched vertically. Hound and Ultra Magnus (hooray!) and smokescreen all look a little narrow in panel 2 and once again in robot form near the bottom of the page. It's so uniform, though, that it looks like if you just squeezed it vertically, it'd look fine.
Anyone else ever notice that if ultra magnus raised his arms out to his sides that those two pylons on his shoulders would crush his head?
That's funny .
Sorry for the long post, but just some suggestions. Looks great! Can't wait to see part 2.
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