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Chapter 1 of Werewolf Tale 2For now, the NaNoWriMo version I was posting is my best one. So, here's the first chapter, in full and in PDF for your downloading convenience. More to come later.
I'm still thinking over the plot details for the rest of the story, but not much else can be said on that front. I'm hoping it delivers, however.
(And yes, *Tacimur also made companion shots of Alex and the two were form poses. Really puts into perspective how much larger he is as a werewolf.)
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I can not download the PDF.
you know which browser allows me to see on the deviantart page the text?
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I use Opera and Brave, both of which have in-page PDF support.
Otherwise, the text below the image has a download link. Same with the button with the green arrow on the page's top right side.
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Figured I'd take a few minutes and give this a read.
One point of criticism:
While I understand this is a sequel, it's problematic that we get dropped right into things without any introduction whatsoever to these characters. It really doesn't take too much exposition to explain who's who. I think that the biggest issue was with Shane - he's repeatedly mentioned (and I've read enough to know that he's the antagonist), yet we never see him. I wondered if there was a prologue to this - just a very brief confrontation between Alex and Shane so that we know where we stand.
Otherwise, good luck writing and I hope to see more from you!
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Interesting. I'll see if I can add a sentence or two where needed. Thanks.
Although, in terms of gradual reveals of these characters, and hinting at what happened, would you say that did the job as well?
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No problem.
I thought that was perfectly fine. To make an analogy, you gave me perfectly good directions, but I don't know quite where the starting point is.
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Ah. I see. Glad to know that was achieved.
Otherwise, I'll see if I can add something in there. Was thinking about how to phrase it at work and yesterday.
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The only serious problem is how to bridge the gap between the two stories.
Good luck!
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Since the gap between them is barely a few seconds, a sentence or two will do the trick.
Although, this is still Draft 1, and chances are the first story will be published before this one is finished.
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Hmm... Food for thought:
What do you usually do when you finish a book? I don't know abou you, but I go to bed, take a walk, go run some errands, watch a movie, or something to that effect. Even if I have the sequel in hand and nothing better to do, I'll at least take a couple hours before starting. That's a problem if you don't give us a little time to ease back into the story.
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