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TheThunder-Art — The Swallowing Sand
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Published: 2017-01-06 22:00:15 +0000 UTC; Views: 5641; Favourites: 29; Downloads: 0
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Quicksand in the Fujin Desert is not visibly recognizable and is more camouflaged than traditional quicksand. Only darker patches of sand point out the danger. Young Shaya, four years old, had gone out for a trek in the hot desert only to unfortunately stumble into the swallowing sand, which is what the desert quicksand is notoriously known as due to not even Catas Tribe natives daring to explore the desert. Will the warm sand consume the little girl completely? Or can she be saved somehow?Related content
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"if it's meant to be the back of a hand."
I intended for it to be the front of a hand.
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Then, it would look like that the girl had two left hands (or is it right hands). ^-^'
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First of all, it seems to be that you are struggling with the sand in the background, It looks too neat going lighter to darker, and the colours do not fit. Try to make the land more un-planned and more natural, not usually wavy lines.
However, the sand at the front is quiet detailed, but I do not understand how this connects to the background, it looks more like a lump then the natural quick sand on the ground.
Going onto the girl, it feels like you've drawn a bit of her and then cropped it. Maybe put some large strands of hair sticking out on the sand to make it better, or try and make the persons head go up, not forwards.
The expression is very good, with the slight tears and wide mouth, just one thing, When us hoomanz talk, our jaws stretch, making our face go wider, meaning that her face would also wider, so the chin would go lower down.
The hairs a bit poofy, I don't know if that's just what its like or not, but it just seems a little bit off.
Your doing well at simple shading and the lighting seems to be improving a lot!
Not knowing if you've studied hand art or art in general, the hand is very VERY well structured, it has mostly good size and its well structured.
Be proud of this piece, it is very good! Keep doing what you love!
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over all the coloring seems ok, but you seem to (like me) struggle with sans and background. looking up reference and such can definitely help.
As for the person the hair seems to be completely detached or hovering from the head, for that i suggest looking up tutorials or looking at anime and cartoons witch is what you seem to going for.
The expression and face are ok on anatomy even if the nose seems oddly placed, the hair distracting greatly.
the hand, i will say i can't see any lines or markings, its just an outline and that makes it very hard to tell what direction its going. once again tutorials and reference will help greatly improve your drawing.
over all ts a good piece even with its flows, keep the creativity flowing!
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This indeed looks like peril on all kinds of perspective and the way you separated the quicksand from the regular sand is certainly something. The emotion on the girl's face just screams help and unfortunately help is a lost cause. The one thing I have to critique you on is the way the girl is pictured. I can see the neck and the body as it sinks so it feels like the girl is rising from the sand than sinking into the sand. First time critiquing a piece like this and this is certainly something that's a job well done.
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Thanks. But... she's sinking.
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Been a while since I’ve been here. I really wanna RP this But I am not entirely sure if you’d be okay with Soy, my Pokémon OC.
If you aren’t I can try to find a different character frappe this RP.
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If you're able to make an OC adjust to the environment and setting, then it's okay. However, I wouldn't want any Pokemon themselves to get involved.
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Not even my own Fakémon?
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I just don't think they would blend in too well given that there are already Mythos on the island of Misla. Not to mention, given the supernatural abilities of Pokemon and Fakemon alike, it's kind of cheating to throw them in depending on what we're doing.
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Fair enough. I’ll use the OC but I’ll leave his Pokémon out of this.
Also I just noticed that auto-correct made my first comment extremely stupid but I guess you knew what I wanted to say.
Anyway ONWARD!
So Shaya is sinking in the sand...
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One more thing. Do you want to make this your entry in my RP Contest ? Or just do this for fun?
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I think I’ll do it for the contest.
And sorry I took so long to respond. I was on a plane.
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No prob.
Turn 1: The Thunder
*4-year-old Shaya was sinking in the warm desert sand. She was in up to her head...*
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(Edited this for the turn thing. Not sure if it’ll come through saying that)
Turn 2: TJK
*just before she is completely submerged, someone grabs her hand and she can feel herself being pulled out*
???: Hang in there, I got you kiddo.
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(Either is fine.)
Turn 3: The Thunder
Young Shaya: ...?
*The quicksand had a strong hold on the little girl, but whoever was pulling her out pulled even stronger. Shaya was then pulled out of the sand to safety. She was on her hands and knees, catching her breath.*
Young Shaya: *gasp... pant... pant...*
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(I hope I’m doing this right)
Turn 4: TJK
*The man who had pulled her out is now sitting down having stumbled back when she had been released from the quicksand’s deadly grip waits for Shaya to be able to catch her breath before speaking*
???: That one was close, amirite?
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Turn 5: The Thunder
Young Shaya: *pant... pant...* I'll say... Whoever you are, thank you for saving my life.
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Turn 6: TJK
???: No problem. My name is Soy. What about you?
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Turn 7: The Thunder
Young Shaya: I... I'm Shaya.
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(Edited for turn label)
Turn 8: TJK
Soy: Nice to meet you Shaya. Say, what’re you doing out in the middle of wherever-the-heck-this-is?
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Turn 9: The Thunder
Young Shaya: I... I was just exploring... This island is my home. And we're out in the Hathorus Desert. But yeah, maybe we'd better leave.
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Turn 10: TJK
Soy: Need a lift? *he puts two fingers in his mouth and exhales, causing a sharp whistle to pierce through the desert; five seconds later, enter: Basket, Soy’s horse; Soy gets on the saddle then looks to Shaya* You might need a lift. *he holds his hand out for jer*
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Turn 11: The Thunder
*Little Shaya takes Soy's hand and gets pulled up on the horse. She then holds tight to Soy's back.*
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Turn 12: TJK
Soy: Which way to your place... Shaya?
*he firmly grips the reigns of the horse (i Don’t know if that isthe correct term) waiting for Shaya’s directions*
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Turn 13: The Thunder
*They ride out of the desert and towards a village.*
Young Shaya: Whatever you do, steer clear of that village! The evil Catas Tribe natives live there and they'll gut us like fish with arrows!
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Turn 14: TJK
Soy: Like fish with arrows? *he turns in another direction steering clear of the village* Wouls you be talking about CATfish?
(Tried to make a pun out of the Catas tribe so... sorry)
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Turn 15: The Thunder
Young Shaya: 
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Turn 16: TJK
After turning away from the village, Soy stifles a laugh and attempts another pun.
Soy: Well I’m sure if they don’t gut us, they’d probably keep us a a Catas-trophy!
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Turn 17: The Thunder
Young Shaya: *laughs* You're funny, Soy!
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Turn 18: TJK
Soy: Why thank you very much, Shaya. *he grips the reigns of his horse and urges him onward as Bucket has begun to slow down* So, Shaya... how old are you if you don’t mind me asking?
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Turn 19: The Thunder
Young Shaya: I'm four.
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Turn 20: TJK
Soy: Only four, eh? Well, thank goodness I saved you or you woulda missed out on an entire lifetime.
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Turn 21: The Thunder
Young Shaya: Ren once told me that people risk their lives every day that they're alive. Anything can happen. ...Oh, Ren is my caretaker. His full name is Lord Rendaxela and he watches over the town where I live. He's raising me, but he lets me explore my island home every day.
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Turn 21: TJK
Soy: I understand what he means. Everyday is a risk in its own way.
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Turn 23: The Thunder
Young Shaya: Mm-hmm.
(Should anything happen along the way back to Rune Town?)
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(Up to you)
Turn 24: TJK
Soy: So Shaya... what's your hometown like?
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Turn 25: The Thunder
Young Shaya: Hmm? Well, at first glance, it's an ordinary town, but it serves as a hub for refugees. The islanders who established the town are either children or descendants of warriors from the war-ravaged island of Darkna. I think it was at least a quarter of a century ago that Darkna islanders first came to Misla to establish new homes. Unfortunately, the Catas Tribe, the original natives of Misla, did not welcome us. The Darkna islanders were strangers in need of food and shelter, and the natives did not welcome us. They threatened the islanders to go back to their own island or perish. The islanders unwillingly went to war to save their own skins and pushed the natives back. A young man named Sheath led the islanders to victory and ultimately spared the lives of the natives... but sadly, that was his undoing. When the Catas Tribe returned with a vengeance, they had summoned the uber-powerful Beastking Dragon to aid them. Sheath was no match and fell in battle, but his wife, Sarla, a former native, summoned the Ten Spirits to defeat the Beastking Dragon. The Ten Spirits then turned on the islanders, predicting that the ways of the Catas Tribe would soon be the ways of the human race. Sarla sealed them away, but at the cost of all her life energy... or so the story goes as I remember being told. When I first came to Rune Town, the refugees believed that I had been raised by fairies... because of this...
*Little Shaya shows Soy her Fairy's Necklace.*
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Turn 26: TJK
Soy only glances at the necklace, still trying to comprehend the backstory.
Soy: Soooo... not only does that sound very interesting... those are some strange names? Although I do have a question... why was the Catas Tribe so unwelcoming?
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Turn 27: The Thunder
Young Shaya: It's possible that they are consumed by their own greed and the darkness in their hearts. Being the original natives, they've strongly believed that Misla belongs only to them and that outsiders would bring destruction with them. However, it seems that only the men seem to be corrupted. The women and children in the village are said to not be treated very well.
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Turn 28: TJK
Soy: Surely there has to be some way to change that.
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Turn 29: The Thunder
Young Shaya: As of now, there's no solution. The only reason the islanders have considered killing all the native men is because of what happened to Sheath when he showed them mercy. The islanders think that something is tainting the men, as the women have gone out of their way to raise their children to be different, yet every boy grows up to become an evil man. It wasn't long after I came to Rune Town before Ren taught me how to use a sword and to cast magic spells. Rune Town consists of townswarriors who are fiercely trained for their own survival. Even children have to be taught at tender ages because when the Catas Tribe natives attack, they spare no one.
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Turn 30: TJK
Soy: Wait a minute... only the boys grow to be evil? Well, that's definitely something there... I don't know what it COULD be though.
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Turn 31: The Thunder
Young Shaya: Whatever it is, it must prey on the darkness in the hearts of mankind. The native men have more power over women and so they end up raising the boys to become evil like themselves, taught to be greedy and unrelenting.
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Turn 32: TJK
Soy: Usually I try to find the good in things... but I got nothing there.
(Side-note, I made a medley poking fun at an Undertale song and wanted your critique on it. Please tell me what you think. Here's a link: www.noteflight.com/scores/view…
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Turn 33: The Thunder
Young Shaya: Not everything has good attached.
(I don't think I can give a proper critique because I never played Undertale.)
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Turn 34: TJK
Soy: Eh... I tend to disagree... usually, when I see a bad guy, I find it to be a positive thing cause they're keeping the good guy in a job... but this sounds more like they're keeping everyone on edge.
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