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3r6O [2008-10-19 11:37:40 +0000 UTC]

Wonderful work!

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breaker82 [2008-10-15 13:23:49 +0000 UTC]

i love the art but like the others i can't tell whether it was bluestreak or prowl. i have to disagree and say that the dialogue was not choppy

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mightybluespider [2008-10-15 06:35:12 +0000 UTC]

I think it's odd for Trailbreaker to be the "Autobrat"

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ladyrazorsharp [2008-10-13 17:23:23 +0000 UTC]

Wow, the art was beautiful! I had a feeling I'd seen that 'bot before...Yay 'Breaker! The moment when Blue/Silverstreak zapped him out of there was awesome.

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a-loft-on-cybertron [2008-10-13 16:54:39 +0000 UTC]

Sorry guys for having meesed up on the spelling and grammar departement. I'm not a natural english speaker and I should have let somebody else check everything one more time .

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teh-dino [2008-10-13 16:37:41 +0000 UTC]

The awesome art is pretty much killed by the poor writing/lettering. Shame :/.

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BoredRobot [2008-10-13 14:37:36 +0000 UTC]

Interesting, and the art is great, but there are a number of English spelling, grammar, and word errors that might be worth revising because they are distracting.

PANEL 4: Refractions of light don't really "bump". Also, you mean "off your disguise" not "of your disguise" Perhaps a clearer sentence would read, "I detected you because of a small light refraction off your disguise"

PANEL 8: Several errors. Should be, "Besides, you were on the verge of being reduced to scrap! If I hadn't got you out . . ."

PANEL 9: Thankfull should be spelled "thankful"

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Yondercat [2008-10-13 13:08:23 +0000 UTC]

trailbreaker! you don't see many of him! awesome!

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victortky [2008-10-13 11:38:57 +0000 UTC]

interesting story. Love the design and colours. That was a close shave.

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ironwarmachine [2008-10-13 08:28:21 +0000 UTC]

great art and tickling story.

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Blackvegetable [2008-10-13 05:51:24 +0000 UTC]

Nice going!

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reddragon162 [2008-10-13 05:32:26 +0000 UTC]

Its always kick-ass to see the bots in their pre-earth modes!

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lonegamer7 [2008-10-13 05:22:13 +0000 UTC]

Words here could've been tweaked to flow a bit better but major points on art.

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JZLobo [2008-10-13 04:49:44 +0000 UTC]

Hmm. The characters seemed a bit too wordy in this one. Did they really have to exposit everything they were doing out loud? It was really annoying when Thrust explained to Trailbreaker HOW he had detected him rather than just shooting him. Sorry, but the dialogue just ruins this one for me.

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NuclearConvoy [2008-10-13 04:42:37 +0000 UTC]

Awesome art, very awesome. Guy should start doing Pro stuff.

Panel 8 has a typo,should be "reduced" not reduce.
Also "hadn't had gotten you out" sounds very clunky. "Hadn't gotten you out" would work fine on its own.

Also, in Panel 9, unless I'm mistaken, Thankful only has one L, you have two.

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Starath [2008-10-13 04:41:00 +0000 UTC]

The panel with a shot of the planet is really beautiful. I like the art in this one.

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ninjha [2008-10-13 04:31:03 +0000 UTC]

wicked! Prelude to IDW comics? I love the art! Another good story from Tronprogram!

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prfctcellrulz [2008-10-13 04:29:38 +0000 UTC]

I recognize War Within Thrust and Prowl, but who's the other Autobot?

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