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My longest page this far. Lots of stuff happening, starting with the discussion on cartoon hands, then introducing 2 "new" major characters, and their connection with BonBon. Also, the outdoors backgrounds you see in here are, for the first time, all vectored by me, which is why it took so long to get this page done. :3 (Of course, the individual buildings as well as the veggie cart were based on screenshots from the show. So still, praises go the animator team where it looks awesome and scolding goes to me where it doesn't. :3)

I've dug into the Derpy - Ditzy "controversy", and finally I decided that I call her both. Some say that in Winter Wrap up there was a different pony who brought the birds back, while they sent Ditzy: my answer is, since Ditzy went into a completely wrong direction, and after they realized this they sent somepony else. They didn't frown much on poor Derpy after she got back empty hoofed, they are kinda used to incidents like this. She got depressed a bit, but her little family is always there to comfort her.

With this disease idea, I can explain why her eyes are normal on one occasion, and derped on another. And also can keep her goofy side that at least half the fandom loves.
Of course, she was bullied frequently when she was a filly (mainly by those pegasi who bullied Fluttershy too), "Derpy" was an insult till she started using it with pride (because she realized that if she doesn't take offense to it, it takes away the point the bullies are using it for).

Also, in this universe she adopted an abandoned filly and named her Dinky Doo. (Here Ditzy is a young adult, in human years she's in her early twenties. I'll most likely do an age distribution summary among the major characters or something, most of them are young adults, with Berry being the oldest.) Although there's no blood relation between them, they act like loving mother and daughter.

As for what's the relation between Derpy and Carrot Top... friendship? Or maybe more? I won't dig into this, I leave it to the readers to decide what goes better with their headcanon. :3



As always, MLP:FiM is owned by Hasbro and created by , I make no profit of this whatsoever, please don't sue me.
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Comments: 279

semi-neutral [2013-04-27 03:37:38 +0000 UTC]

you`re delivering so many cute moments with this comic

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Ajax94 [2013-04-25 20:44:07 +0000 UTC]

Poor Derpy...
but great episode!

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Strabatz [2013-04-22 12:21:08 +0000 UTC]

Uhm...
*Jump forwards for an hug-attack*
You saved my day.
In my life lots things are absolutely grey and dark and .. bwah...
Ponies are bringing back the color in my messed brain, and your comic had brighten up my mood a lot!
I guess that lasts for a bunch of weeks <3
so, thank you thank you thank you!
(And your backgrounds are awesome, well vectored)

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Centaur71 [2013-04-21 03:58:24 +0000 UTC]

Forget candy; the Pony needs to become a Pharmacist/Chemist!

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NerfPony [2013-04-17 23:53:09 +0000 UTC]

Last panel is Lyra's "I'm so gonna score!" face.

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DoctorH00ves In reply to ??? [2013-04-16 23:09:01 +0000 UTC]

new head canon

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e-liisu In reply to ??? [2013-04-16 21:16:29 +0000 UTC]

So THAT's where Rare Candies are from.

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fotland42 [2013-04-16 00:37:21 +0000 UTC]

In the future, Bon-Bon cures Ditzy's genetic disease, at the cost of her wings. At that point, Carrot Top recognizes it is time for the truth to be known, and reveals that she is in fact Ditzy from the (now nearer) future. Bon-Bon toils for many years to develop first a candy that makes its consumer younger, then a general formula to induce any desired change in appearance, and finally a candy that causes time travel, in order to prevent a time paradox from destroying Equestria.

That is the relation between Derpy and Carrot Top.

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Feyenard [2013-04-15 21:23:35 +0000 UTC]

Bonblushies are at least as cute as Twiblushies

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alphaboy202 In reply to Feyenard [2013-04-15 22:30:02 +0000 UTC]

I agree. so good!

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chris100100 [2013-04-15 20:45:59 +0000 UTC]

Poor Derpy But at least she doesn't have *shivers* 5 fingers! How crazy and absolutely disgusting of a mutation that would be.

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SuperSweetSugar In reply to ??? [2013-04-15 19:24:47 +0000 UTC]

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leinad615 In reply to ??? [2013-04-15 11:55:58 +0000 UTC]

I swear, Bon Bon's blush is giving me Diabetus.

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attack193 In reply to ??? [2013-04-15 05:56:11 +0000 UTC]

DAAAAAWWWWWW!!!! BonBon is so adorable in that last frame!

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TLSlimehunter In reply to ??? [2013-04-15 03:52:35 +0000 UTC]

Really feels like mystery dungeon. loving it

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BB-K In reply to ??? [2013-04-15 03:06:23 +0000 UTC]

best friends ever.

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Shanenator777 In reply to ??? [2013-04-15 02:25:40 +0000 UTC]

Wow this is surprisingly dark. I really like how you're fleshing out the MLP universe in a more realistic manner. Quite the convincing tale thus far.

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J-Dude In reply to ??? [2013-04-15 01:39:35 +0000 UTC]

Aaaaaaaand Skepti-BonBon rears her head at last.

I'm a skeptic myself, but yeah, gotta love when the inevitably grounded characters grind the mystery down to a halt by proposing banal explanations that we KNOW aren't right because otherwise we wouldn't have a story. Realistic? Yes. But it makes the pacing plod by.

I'm actually surprised BonBon has been so good with all of this so far. It's refreshing to see a story that dispenses with the usual dynamic of BonBon being the straight-mare and Lyra being her crazy conspiratorial foil. Hell, even Anthropology, a story I ADORE, did this, making BonBon an OBNOXIOUS detracting naysayer, even when Lyra's been proven right, is a human being standing in front of her, and has for all intents and purposes saved the world.

Here, I love that sparks fly between them, mainly from BonBon's side. I love that Lyra behaves so innocently, making offhand remarks of gratitude and offering compliments that almost sound like pickup lines, as delivered by a MASTER Lothario. To the point that we almost don't know if Lyra is interested AT ALL.

It leaves the effect of a legitimate means for them to become an item, one that's believable instead of just portraying them as a stock bickering couple, Lyra being Homer to BonBon's Marge.

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Coolioplasm In reply to ??? [2013-03-29 14:01:10 +0000 UTC]

As much as I love the series I'm not quite the fan of how you did Derpy, I think of her more as just a clumsy pony with silly eyes.

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TriteBristle In reply to Coolioplasm [2013-03-29 14:36:47 +0000 UTC]

She's still a clumsy pony with occasionally silly eyes, she's just not a retard like how many other comics depict her.

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GiromCalica In reply to ??? [2013-03-06 11:43:27 +0000 UTC]

You can't die from blushing, but you can die from erotic asphyxiation.

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RoboKitty In reply to ??? [2013-02-26 02:59:48 +0000 UTC]

Was about to pounce on you for calling Derpy "Ditzy" (because I have canonical PROOF that they're separate ponies) but then I read the artist's comments. And if you went through the effort to think that all up and write all that down, you might as well keep it

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TriteBristle In reply to RoboKitty [2013-02-27 14:50:02 +0000 UTC]

I'm open for all canonical proof, what do you have?

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RoboKitty In reply to TriteBristle [2013-02-27 15:39:55 +0000 UTC]

Simple: Rainbow Dash's Bird Retrieval Team can be clearly seen twice, and Derpy is not in it either time
[link]

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TriteBristle In reply to RoboKitty [2013-02-27 18:57:17 +0000 UTC]

I think you are falling into the over-analyzation mistake, by assuming that the animators didn't just put non-main character ponies at random. Which means any serious speculation on them is quite pointless. :3 (By which I mean speculation is okay as long as one keeps in mind that the animators don't always care about small details like background pony consistency.)

Also, my comic doesn't need to be perfectly accurate with the show, just compatible with it. :3 So I can make so that Derpy is late, and goes into the wrong direction to get the birds. The one who is clearing clouds is a clone/doppelganger.

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RoboKitty In reply to TriteBristle [2013-02-27 23:23:40 +0000 UTC]

"assuming that the animators didn't just put non-main character ponies at random"
Except they don't put Derpy at random; she's written into the storyboards

"Also, my comic doesn't need to be perfectly accurate with the show"
You went through the trouble of writing a story for Derpy, and I still say you should use it

"The one who is clearing clouds is a clone/doppelganger"
So the rumors were true!!

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TriteBristle In reply to RoboKitty [2013-02-28 12:02:21 +0000 UTC]

"Except they don't put Derpy at random; she's written into the storyboards"
Could you give proof for that claim? I'm curious about it, since I don't know much about how the show is actually made.

"So the rumors were true!!"
I'll explain it (well, my version of it) in further detail in a chapter or two.
The greatest part of them is that I could simply write down any occurrence of anypony on the show screen by saying that that particular pony was just a "clone/doppelganger".

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RoboKitty In reply to TriteBristle [2013-02-28 17:43:15 +0000 UTC]

"I could simply write down any occurrence of anypony on the show screen by saying that that particular pony was just a "clone/doppelganger"."
IT WAS THE CHANGELINGS!!

As for Derpy, I don't remember where they said it, but I KNOW they said it. It's, like, "common knowledge" for Derpy fanatics. Here's one of the storyboards in question: [link]

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fallenprince56 In reply to RoboKitty [2013-03-02 15:55:17 +0000 UTC]

eats popcorn

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Allanpike In reply to ??? [2013-02-19 18:15:36 +0000 UTC]

Very nice. I love how you use so many factors when it comes to Derpy!

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LanceOmikron In reply to ??? [2013-02-19 11:06:52 +0000 UTC]

That's a pretty good way to reconcile Derpy's/Ditzy's name. At this point, I've pretty much made it my headcanon that it's a fairly common practice in Equestria for a pony's nickname to end up displacing their original name If they or others like the new name enough. I can think of... four examples off the top of my head: Ditzy->Derpy is possible, Sweetie Drops->Bon Bon is pretty much necessary (for hopefully obvious reasons), Golden Harvest->Carrot Top is canon via the trading cards, and ????->Aunt Applesauce is canon via the show.

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GingerAlan-Rocket In reply to ??? [2013-02-19 05:49:41 +0000 UTC]

Moar!!!

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Niklas123dk In reply to ??? [2013-02-18 23:07:52 +0000 UTC]

Ineedwords.

Best is when Derpy says "Ughh... Seriously, Who put a tree in the middle of the sky?" And Bon Bon's blush, Plus i think in 10 panel where there stands CRASH, Bon Bon needs 'ear down'... Actually i think other parts of this comic too? But it could just be me, Nvm me, You did a great job on this comic, Can't wait for more!

Plus can't wait for Season 4 of MLP:FIM.

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hentaispyder In reply to ??? [2013-02-18 18:33:52 +0000 UTC]

Why can these comics never be further along
I hate finding a good comic and not being able to read alot i hope more come soon

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electricdragon505 In reply to ??? [2013-02-18 14:07:11 +0000 UTC]

Is DD going to be making another appearance soon?

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TriteBristle In reply to electricdragon505 [2013-02-18 18:34:06 +0000 UTC]

She'll make a lasting impression. :3

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TheKoboldNecromancer In reply to ??? [2013-02-14 01:43:47 +0000 UTC]

Wow. Fitting Derpy and Carrot in there so wonderfully, like a real story with real issues... it really captivated me.

Then Bonbon brought up blushing to death, and I was back with cute ponies again.

Seriously, I love how this story can be so thoughtful and so fun at the same time.

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Ewandra In reply to ??? [2013-02-12 09:26:09 +0000 UTC]

Yay! Yay! Yay!!! I'm really enjoying this! Nice to see Carrot Top!! Wonderful comic, just amazing!

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Tastes-Like-Fry In reply to ??? [2013-02-12 04:39:53 +0000 UTC]

Yay update! <3

Wish I could see Derpy though - but the focus isn't meant to be on her. Nice to see Carrot Top.

... hanging out for her to meet DD though

Good job! I'm hooked on this story!

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TriteBristle In reply to Tastes-Like-Fry [2013-02-12 10:33:57 +0000 UTC]

We'll have plenty of Derpy later.

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JohnnyNorthrain In reply to ??? [2013-02-11 10:49:01 +0000 UTC]

Noooooo! Only because no more pages at the moment. I love the dynamic here except I'm kinda against Derpy having a daughter but that's just me. Looking forward to more.

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TriteBristle In reply to JohnnyNorthrain [2013-02-11 11:39:17 +0000 UTC]

Adopted daughter. Because this version of her is too young to have a filly with Dinkie's age. :3

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JohnnyNorthrain In reply to TriteBristle [2013-02-11 19:01:28 +0000 UTC]

Thank you! That's what I keep thinking and why I'm against it. Well that and the whole Doctor/Derpy thing but adopted makes much more sense. I love the glimpse of Human Lyra in her dream.

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TriteBristle In reply to JohnnyNorthrain [2013-02-12 01:14:43 +0000 UTC]

I'll give out a minor spoiler: the "Doctor" in this universe is simply an earth pony called Time Turner, nothing to do with time lords. (I'm not a doctor who watcher, and I think there are plenty of Doctor Hooves comics out there to make the fans happy. ) Though that doesn't mean that he isn't somewhat mysterious, having an hourglass as a cutie mark, yet being an earth pony and not a unicorn. He won't get most likely much screen time, but i'll put down some foundations and encourage people to "adopt" him (comics, blogs, etc) if they find this version of him appealing.

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JohnnyNorthrain In reply to TriteBristle [2013-02-12 12:58:58 +0000 UTC]

I like that. I don't really care if the Doctor has an appearance as the Doctor or not, I figure he's too busy saving the world in the show to really show up except at background times but I'm very much looking forward to more of Lyra and Bon Bon. They were not a ship I liked until I started reading your work.

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Darentez In reply to ??? [2013-02-11 08:12:00 +0000 UTC]

So far... so good... but invisible arms??? is Elfen Lied related to this??? It better not...

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ninjadejedi [2013-02-11 00:40:47 +0000 UTC]

Awesome. It's great. Nice work. I think you guys has the best fan community compare to other fiction. The fan musics are great, the comics and fictions are also great.

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Twylite-Sparkle [2013-02-09 04:15:52 +0000 UTC]

"Heartstrings" completes the trifecta of Pony coverage, it is so show-worthy good.
MLP the TV side, JanAnimations the Internet side, & Heartstrings the comic side.

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Nevel7 In reply to ??? [2013-02-08 23:34:19 +0000 UTC]

Love this comic series!

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CosmicTail42 In reply to ??? [2013-02-08 23:33:46 +0000 UTC]

Oh Lyra. You flatter you ! It's so cute to see Bonbon blush.
You really worked so hard for this long comic, I think I give you credit for that .

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