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DarkFall16 — My World Chapter 6 ( The Beast Within 7 )

Published: 2016-11-30 16:10:15 +0000 UTC; Views: 1763; Favourites: 6; Downloads: 75
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Description I thought about writing for this, but decided against it, but I will give a quick over view of each frame, and then leave it up to you as for what was said.

Mullins is telling Dakota about his daughter, and how he had lost his mind for almost a year until Amy, and how sorry he was about what happened  between him and Jenna,  how he had worked for the girls Dad.
Dakota is telling him about how mixed up and confused Jenna is right now, but not what her dad had done to her, not yet, and how he needs to talk to Jenna.

The two sisters are talking sister stuff, just catching up, Amy is telling Jenna how Frank taught her to shoot, and was training her in martial arts , and how good he is to her.
Jenna is telling Amy about how much she cares for Dakota, but not going into any real detail about them yet.

Frank Mullins is apologizing to Jenna, telling her how sorry he was, and that he would like them to start over with a clean slate, and in the bottom right frame, they are talking things out.

How he knew all along about her dad, and that it was wrong to blame her for what her dad had done,  how close him and Amy had become, and that he would like the same for them, and could they work on having a good relationship.
Jenna ask him he has told Amy about their father, and Mullins replies "only what she needs to know right now, she is still a little young "

They all agree to go back to Dakota's place, and figure things out from there.




This is how I decided to handle this update, I could have wrote three pages on this, and if for some reason I would ever write a book on this story I would. 
Thank you for looking and hope you understand that I thought this was the best way to handle it, so we can move on from here.
THANK YOU and thank you for all your comments, and please share any thoughts you have, it always helps me along this path. 
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Comments: 15

Rov65 [2016-12-02 18:25:11 +0000 UTC]

Great work! It's sometimes hard to put the frames into words. Clearly, when you made the frames, you had the accompanying story in your head. But I can understand that after finishing the frames you sometimes just don't want to put the words down. Do I makes sense ?

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LmAnt [2016-12-02 09:24:12 +0000 UTC]

It was said already and I agree that your decision to limit the text to your narration was a good one. Not that I wouldn't like reading more text, but in this case it would have been ..epic, I guess.
And like also said already, the pictures perfectly illustrate what's going on, so even without any text one could understand the progress that little party is making.
What I also see are a lot of interesting possibilities for interactions! Mullins - Dakota, Mullins - Jenna, Jenna - Dakota, Everyone in some way with Amy,...
There's an amazing amount of conflict potential!
But maybe at the end they live all together as one big happy family

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Kevlar31 [2016-12-01 11:24:04 +0000 UTC]

This was very well handled, in fact the pictures really tell the story anyway, you must learn that a picture really can paint a thousand words.

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berseh [2016-11-30 19:55:07 +0000 UTC]

The arrival of Mullins and his reconciliation with Jenna leaves Dakota in unknown territory doesn't it? Not that Jenna all of a sudden would fall for him but here is a goodwilling male. You've been careful to let Dakota not express too much of her feelings for Jenna, so she definitely has some backspace, but still..

Then there is this other very interesting male character, the Colonel..

Very nice pictures, and a good storyboard. I feel like watching a movie or one of these cable tv serials, such is the sense of rythm.

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Laspe [2016-11-30 16:55:25 +0000 UTC]

I see how writing dialogue for such a scene could easily turn into walls of text… The characters are complex as we already know, and probably neither discussion was an easy one, considering the events and circumstances preceding what we see in the frames… Everything is very well shown though and we can gauge the reactions of the characters to what is being said and explained by their expressions and postures… And it’s great to know that everybody seems to be on the same page now…


PS: I know that it is very unlikely the story will go there, but I like how Mullins and Dakota look together. Wouldn’t be surprised if Mullins feels an attraction for her down the road. After all it would be natural for him to end up liking somebody in a way other than “just friends”…

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DarkFall16 In reply to Laspe [2016-11-30 16:58:17 +0000 UTC]

You just keep giving me things to think about don't you my friend 
but what would we do about Jenna who is already in love with Dakota, damn that would be interesting  
Thank You

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Laspe In reply to DarkFall16 [2016-11-30 18:04:59 +0000 UTC]

Hehe... Yes, I like sharing my thoughts as they are... Indeed, if something like that develops Jenna's situation and reaction would be great to follow!

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DarkFall16 In reply to Laspe [2016-11-30 19:15:38 +0000 UTC]

Jenna would be a mess if that were to happen,it might just push psycho girl right over the edge   

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Laspe In reply to DarkFall16 [2016-11-30 20:14:48 +0000 UTC]

Poor Jenna!

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fluidMetal [2016-11-30 16:42:57 +0000 UTC]

Some very nice images...

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DarkFall16 In reply to fluidMetal [2016-11-30 16:50:20 +0000 UTC]

Thank You, do you think I handled this the right way my friend, I did not want to drag this out  unnecessarily, we do have the meat of the story to get to  

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fluidMetal In reply to DarkFall16 [2016-11-30 17:50:48 +0000 UTC]

Absolutely.  I think that the back story needs to be short and sweet and to the point.  Hit all the relevant high points and then bang - move to the important stuff.

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Torre7 [2016-11-30 16:25:51 +0000 UTC]

This works for me.   

I like the tranquil setting despite the crazy world all around them. 

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KristinF [2016-11-30 16:15:44 +0000 UTC]

Amazing work hon.

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DarkFall16 In reply to KristinF [2016-11-30 16:53:14 +0000 UTC]

Thank you my Dear, I am glad you like them   

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