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DarkFall16 — My World ( End of Chapter 1)
Published: 2016-09-25 19:07:30 +0000 UTC; Views: 1179; Favourites: 3; Downloads: 67
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'What was that all about Harold?-The girl was asking about her father.
-You didn't tell her, did you?
-No Margret, I didn't. I told her some of it, about the ring. But the rest she will have to find out on her own.
-You're going to have to tell her Harold, she needs to know.
-I can't bring myself to tell that young lady that her dad belonged to a group of murderous pigs. Probably still does, for all we know. I feel bad enough for helping them obtain that land. That's something I have to live with every day. But at least, he had enough decency not to drag them two girls along into this madness, Thank God for that Margret.
-He deliberately left them in that house to die, Harold. In my book, that's not decency.
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Story is building very nicely and questions are growing larger and larger. I wonder when critical mass comes. Dark renders are super.
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Great ending of the first chapter with yet another twist introduced to make us further wonder what My World is really like, what drives the characters there… and whether Jenna’s father may have been in any way involved in what happened… Something definitely has happened, and we are yet to find out what it was… Same as Jenna, we are immersed into more mysteries… which in turn makes this example of fine story telling so enjoyable!
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A great end of a first chapter. With a cliffhanger and huge questions on what the society is all about. Super work!
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it isn‘t surprising that this secret dark society that you‘ve implemented with the last picture is (or was) acting dark. It‘s still though that it also acted darkly against their own families.
That is giving me some things to think about.
What kind of society is frankly dooming its back by sacrifying their families? What kind of families has that been? What happened to turn a caring father of two daughters into a monster?
And what about Mr Wilson? Is he really just the usual opportunist?
Questions, questions, questions...
Great!
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Thank you for your wonderful comment my dear friend, I am glad you are enjoying, The next chapter will reveal a bit more about Jenna's father and the Order of the Scarlet Band, but keep in mind the only person that said he left them girls there to die is Mrs. Wilson, there is always two sides to everything spoiler chapter two is going to open with Jenna's dad, I am working on creating him now, I need the perfect look for him though.
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you see, old ladies are never as suspicious as old men are!
However, like said already, I am not going to make too many guessings right now already. Too much open questions yet. So I am really curiously waiting how this all is going to develop
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Thank You, there is more to come, questions that is .....
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Thank you for your continued support my friend
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