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I've noticed that the page views have been up ever since I introduced the girls into the book... wonder why that is.
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Another great page, the last panel is simply ACE.Β
We get to see the girls in action - oh yeah! And damnit Zac, stop being so hot (love how you drew his charge towards Mr. Avian intruder on panel three).
Now the only thing I'm slightly confused about this page is on panel two: Was there contact with Aya's kick (aka her foot) to Mr. Avian intruder's chest? I can clearly see the hit mark but if he was meant to get hit on that panel what lacked was his expression towards that impact of Aya's kick to his chest. That expression to me was more like a "Huh?" or "What th-"... If Aya kicked me like that I would've been like: "UGGH!" "Grrk!" with one eye closed at least to indicate some sort of reaction to her kick (ala pain).
The follow up on panel three was perfect - I can definitely see pain/stress in his eyes (he's closin' both - yes!)
Anyways keep up the awesome stuff! You also put a lot of effect into your backgrounds (which is another thing readers and artists take for granted) - you add that swirling dynamism to the BG's perspective - creates tension and drama which is very nice. *thumbs up*
Did I say that Zac was hot? Oh yes I did, and don't worry I'm straight. XXD But I also admire when the guys do their thang! Go kick ass boys (and girls!)
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Heheheeee - gosh I love reading your crits, hon. And thank you so much again
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Damsels in distress? Nope, don't see none of those here.
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Breaking the stereotype is always good. ^^
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Excellent comic art, Dawn.
This is how your fight as a team.
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Excellent comic, Dawn.
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Awesome work on these, your skills and talents really make these look amazing 
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Thanks hon! It's been a great joy to work on!
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Everyone loves strong confident female characters ^^Β Especially ones that can kick butt as well as the guys, if not better XD
Another fun page
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Mhm ^^
Btw, I remember you saying a while ago that you'd look into that Sally/Sly Crossover comic I was working on with a friend. Had a chance to look at it?
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Don't worry, I don't want anything on your end beyond just a simple opinion about it XDΒ I know at first you said something about a cover for fun, but I'm assuming there were certain things said revolving around it that you saw that scared you off from that, which I understand entirely ^^
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Ohhhhyes! I need to get on that! It's looking great, at first glance. Lemme get you a big write-up
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Awesome, looking forward to it X3
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