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(srry for the typos - if you see one; let me know! I'm horrible with typing...)
The story begins...here on Earth...where natural selection wandered a slightly different way, guided by the metaphysical flows of energy.
Cheederians are large, horse-sized FELINES with some metaphysical powers. They look like a Oriental cat - lynx- tiger hybrid, living on the Northern hemisphere.
Cheederian species, characters and story by me. Please don't copy and/or use it without my permission!
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Good! I'm happy to hear that.
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This page... the artwork... It's so... beautiful.
Amazing intro.
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I'll see if I can go through your comic and be a "grammar Nazi"
This page:
Line 6 -- did you mean "resources" instead of "sources?" It isn't wrong, but resources is the more common term when dealing with environmental science.
Line 7 -- existance should be existence.
Line 9 -- a comma is appropriate between "endless" and "changing," OR you could write it as "endlessly changing."
Line 10 -- the phrase never-ending is a little repetitive ("endless" was used in the last line). Replace it with a synonym, such as "eternal" or "perpetual."
Line 11 -- generations could also be generation, but it isn't really wrong; it just made me pause.
The last two paragraphs, though they make sense, are a little awkward; they could use a second look.
And just so you know, I've already read through the comic once- I love it so far! You've obviously done a lot of background work on it, and your dedication shows. I adore your style and species! I found your beta-reader journal in my inbox today (I haven't been on because of school, and I'm on Christmas Break now), so I figured I would give a little input where I could. I am a native speaker from the Midwestern United States, but feel free to cross-reference my input with other English Speakers. Again, though- I love it!
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I think this would be really awesome as a physical comic series once it's finished. I know I would buy it. :3
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Thanks!!! Good to hear - before I make a printed version I first have to put a poll or something on my DA to see how many people would really buy it. It's ratehr an investment...
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I would buy that 
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Wow truely spectacular love the way you draw their thick long fur on those lovely felids!
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Thanks!! Good you like my cheederians hehe
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They are definatly the most epic cats I've ever seen if they were real I would definatly have one as a pet even if their a little big for that just cause their so cute and FLUFFY!!!!!
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Sounds interesting, but I just wanted to point out that you misplaced the "c" and the "i" in "metapysical" in the second line.
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Also on the next page, second paragraph.
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Hey, this is kind of late but I thought I'd let you know anyways...
Resources instead of sources, existence*, no "in" just "...evolution, only a few species...", got a* grip.
There you go. Also, it looks cool and interesting so far (:
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awesome so farI LOVE IT!! IVE WAITED FOREVER 4 U DO MAKE IT INTO A BOOK !!!!!! YAY
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Good!! I just began 
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yay!!! ive actually loved your art for a while and was about to implode when i found out that u made the stuff
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hehe really? Nice to hear that!
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Absolutely stunning! 
I love the cave-painting look here, the old-fashioned touch really goes with the content, and I must say, the way the drawings intertwine and blend together is just plain gorgeous.
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Thankies - ha yeah therefore I have drawn it by hand, with charcoal
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wohoe - next one submitted
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Yeah - I will gradually change to a more regular style in the intro 
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wow very mysterios!so niceIrelly like the background! nice job!
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Thanks! kinda all blended together
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ohh really?!
I didn't recognize...
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Thanks! - it's actually just rough science 
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Looks great and promising
btw, what font did you use here if I may ask?
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Old English Text - my favourite
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thought so, one of my favourites aswell
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really cool send page!
loved tim introduction! really well written
also the style you used in this is very beautiful! O.O looks like an ancient painting or something *.*
amazing! \m/
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Thanks! Yep I tried to make it look cave-painting like. First had the idea to make it really liek a cavepainting with stick-figures...but this looks more into my style
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This beginning is very intriguing, I'm looking forward to see the next page)
And will the story remain in the same style for the rest of the story?)
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hehe not at all - this drawing just depicts evolution over billions. So I've chosen for some kind of ancient cave-painting style. However, even already in the introduction I gradually change to the style I have used in the one page comics (mainly Wintersport 1&2, soemthing in between). But the whole intro will have a kinda history atmosphere. The rest will just be regular comic style - but more or less in my own way XDD
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And how many pages will the intro include?)
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If you say "just 10" you mean compared to the whole story this number is little? x) So the story itself will be long, won't it?)
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Yep I thinking about 200-300 pages actually...but it depends a bit on how much I can keep focussed on this volume instead of going to may fav storyline with my Norwegian characters...
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So many? It's great : D
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hehe only if I don't give up half-way..or decide so cut out a lot of scenes...I hope not ^^
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oh Mystic! this is so beautiful! the feel...the 'flow' of it all, I can feel it here!wow. And it's also so simple, I love love love simple things, because in simplisity lies the base and standing ground for all the glorious detail that we adore, caught up in that, we tend to forget where the beginning is and to apprecait that. I love this!
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Thankies! Yep I have indeed chosen for a very simple, cave painting like idea. The first I idea I had was maybe even more simple with nearly stickfigures like you see in some cave paintings...but I thougth this would bem ore beautiful.
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