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Published: 2010-10-13 09:06:10 +0000 UTC; Views: 7938; Favourites: 76; Downloads: 22
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Edit: This is a redone version. All pages will go through this process
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First Bubble:
-"Have mom send you" should be "did mom send you"
-"Decission" is spelled wrong, there is only 1 "s" (decision)
Second Bubble:
-"Storys" is spelled "stories"
"fully" should be "full"
Third Bubble:
"get told" sounds better as "learn"
Fourth Bubble:
-"storys" at the end is "stories"
Fifth Bubble:
-"Lieng" is spelled wrong, it is "lying"
-"this storys" should be "These stories" or "the stories"
-"an other wolf that" would sound better as "any other wolf as"
Sixth Bubble:
-"till today i ask myself why." should be "Still today, I ask myself, why?"
Seventh Bubble:
-"you coudnt have hold them up this or that way" should be more like "you couldn't have held them up either way"
Eight Bubble:
-"dealed" should be "dealt"
BTW- your art is so good, I love how you've improved so much from when I started watching you.
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Oh yeah I was wondered myself O.o
But thanks a lot :3
and you counted some points I really wasnt sure with XD
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Your Welcome. It was kind of fun for me, too. Do you want me to continue checking as you come out with more pages?
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yap every time I post new ones you may correct ;3
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The bottom left part where razer speaks I think it should be Lying, not lieng and All these stories
Sorry if I seem snitchy... Im just wondering if you ever wanted to publish it and have good grammar
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for the lying I wasnt sure
im german so my english isnt supposed to be perfect every time x3
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Ik Ik
Just tryin to help
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Another re-done page
I want to ask you one thing. Why did you removed the eye making? I'm just curious about it 
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I didnt removed^^
they just show up now when they got big feelings
for example angry, love or shame
then the signs glow
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Oh, ok
Then it is a bit like the main characters of my comic. They have markings (not eye markings, it's back markings or shoulder markings) that are symbols of theyr power and only appear when they are training, or in battle, or angry.
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Wow, a pretty big style change! It looks really good!
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thanks 
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It's a lot more realistic at the very least
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thanks
exactly what I try to^^
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YAY! Me and my sister had bet which was going to happen to her xD
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CRISPY! Haha I like this page ^^ I luvs it I luvs it~
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thanks^^ even I think the background looks a bit too unreal x)
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