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Published: 2005-08-09 23:13:44 +0000 UTC; Views: 580; Favourites: 5; Downloads: 57
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i.You’ll never know how scared I am.
If you look deep enough,
Though,
You would see me shiver at the slightest breeze.

ii. I am not afraid of water anymore.
I used to sit by the pool
Watching children play
Thinking about innocence, and how I felt different.
My mother would tell me to join them.
"It is childish" I would say. ~ She would then remind me that I was only seven.

I didn’t believe her.

iii. My mouth is dry from imagining yours touching it.
Swirling together are my anxieties and my perception of what I look like.
On the inside.
I am scared you see and I turn my head. I turn my head back, laughing. I am
Just being comical – you aren’t there anyways.

iv. Trying to find a pencil is hard
Sometimes
And it seems like the only thing I find these days are dried up pens.
If they do work, they are the wrong color and I lose my concentration.
I fear the color purple for some reason.
Maybe because that is a strange color for a man to love,
But you did.

v. My stomach doesn’t settle anymore and I want to cut it out.
You never told me you wanted to leave
But you still did
Then the water broke and flooded my mind ruining everything beautiful about you
I am not afraid of water anymore, though.

"water" by Angel Morningstar
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Comments: 35

chihirohyuga [2007-07-15 19:33:06 +0000 UTC]

lovely. dark, but lovely......

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Shadowed-FerretChild [2006-03-16 20:17:14 +0000 UTC]

I really liked this - it showed full-bodied emotion that kept me gripped throughout the whole poem. And, of course, the image fits perfectly, too. Well done!

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phr3ak000000000 In reply to Shadowed-FerretChild [2006-03-17 05:41:12 +0000 UTC]

thank you so much, i am glad you enjoyed it. means a lot to me

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tehown [2005-09-04 01:19:57 +0000 UTC]

i really love this one alot, I have a certain interest for poses of people naked or not naked buddling. I like the poem also.

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phr3ak000000000 In reply to tehown [2005-09-04 06:32:06 +0000 UTC]

thanks so much! glad you enjoyed it she is very lovely

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Malefictarium [2005-08-27 17:18:46 +0000 UTC]

very vivid, really brought it down to earth.. absolutely fantastic peice, all in all.

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phr3ak000000000 In reply to Malefictarium [2005-08-27 17:27:55 +0000 UTC]

thank you so much, i am happy when ppl enjoy that one, it is sort of experimental style for me, thank you so much!

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Malefictarium In reply to phr3ak000000000 [2005-08-28 03:51:07 +0000 UTC]

it was my pleasure!

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employdascaskets [2005-08-25 09:06:20 +0000 UTC]

everytime you write something, you seem to wonderfully entwine the pictures with its poem. you are awesome at doing this. Its all so inspiring.

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phr3ak000000000 In reply to employdascaskets [2005-08-25 17:40:12 +0000 UTC]

thank you so much. i appreciate you saying that more than you may know. really means a lot to me.

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employdascaskets In reply to phr3ak000000000 [2005-08-25 21:28:57 +0000 UTC]

well it was much deserved.

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alphie0216 [2005-08-10 17:21:41 +0000 UTC]

totally awesome! again! as always! good choice of pic!

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phr3ak000000000 In reply to alphie0216 [2005-08-10 23:44:24 +0000 UTC]

you are too sweet, thank you! wonderful stock here on DA!

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BloodKitsune [2005-08-10 09:09:24 +0000 UTC]

awesome, as usual

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neo-tek [2005-08-10 05:04:39 +0000 UTC]

very nice work, i like the ideas here, and the way it's structured gives it the feel of a conversation, perhaps with oneself, but perhaps not, it's mysterious. i like mystery

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phr3ak000000000 In reply to neo-tek [2005-08-10 05:06:38 +0000 UTC]

oooh mysteries are fun... ya, this was a different type of peice, i kinda like the turnout. thanks so much!

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neo-tek In reply to phr3ak000000000 [2005-08-10 05:13:43 +0000 UTC]

i like mystery, reminds me why i love life...not knowing how things come about or why is pivotal...of course i still try to figure everything out because i'm still human but mystery is nice lol

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phr3ak000000000 In reply to neo-tek [2005-08-10 05:20:51 +0000 UTC]

oh so do i, understand completely. intruige... need it.

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neo-tek In reply to phr3ak000000000 [2005-08-10 05:40:07 +0000 UTC]

this is truth, intrigue has such a back alley, 007 ring to it, nice word choice lol

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darkwolfj13 [2005-08-10 03:38:02 +0000 UTC]

That is so awsome.. Its so soft, and mellow, flowing from word to sentance and so on... *I'm all quiet and thoughtful now...* I think I'll think awhile...

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phr3ak000000000 In reply to darkwolfj13 [2005-08-10 04:43:20 +0000 UTC]

thank you so muchly

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darkwolfj13 In reply to phr3ak000000000 [2005-08-10 05:22:36 +0000 UTC]

You are very welcome

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obscured-stock [2005-08-10 02:25:14 +0000 UTC]

i really feel this one.. ive been there.. dear lord not too long ago at that.. beautiful words like usualy

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phr3ak000000000 In reply to obscured-stock [2005-08-10 02:31:57 +0000 UTC]

thanks ya, confusion!

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ProsePetals [2005-08-10 01:32:11 +0000 UTC]

Whoa...this is intense. Had to read it twice.

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phr3ak000000000 In reply to ProsePetals [2005-08-10 01:34:02 +0000 UTC]

i would kiss you if there werent a division of miles between us hehe so i guess the monitor will have to do

thank you so so so much means so much you like!

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ProsePetals In reply to phr3ak000000000 [2005-08-10 01:56:52 +0000 UTC]



I like good poetry. Simple as that.

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KarrinGray [2005-08-10 00:20:49 +0000 UTC]

Very beautiful. You really held my attention throughout the whole piece,it stayed strong the whole way.

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phr3ak000000000 In reply to KarrinGray [2005-08-10 01:24:49 +0000 UTC]

thank you! i am really glad you liked it that's awesome!

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judylee [2005-08-10 00:01:21 +0000 UTC]

This poem is so incredible to me that I don't even need the visual but it just makes the feelings of the words seem that much more vulnerable if that is possible.

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phr3ak000000000 In reply to judylee [2005-08-10 01:29:12 +0000 UTC]

thankyou!!! so so much

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phoenixmentality [2005-08-09 23:27:46 +0000 UTC]

Good job

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phr3ak000000000 In reply to phoenixmentality [2005-08-10 01:30:51 +0000 UTC]

thanks!

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InfiniteOne [2005-08-09 23:16:24 +0000 UTC]

Beautiful...

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phr3ak000000000 In reply to InfiniteOne [2005-08-09 23:17:05 +0000 UTC]

thank you very much!

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