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Thank you to ~obscured-stock for the wonderful imagei.You’ll never know how scared I am.
If you look deep enough,
Though,
You would see me shiver at the slightest breeze.
ii. I am not afraid of water anymore.
I used to sit by the pool
Watching children play
Thinking about innocence, and how I felt different.
My mother would tell me to join them.
"It is childish" I would say. ~ She would then remind me that I was only seven.
I didn’t believe her.
iii. My mouth is dry from imagining yours touching it.
Swirling together are my anxieties and my perception of what I look like.
On the inside.
I am scared you see and I turn my head. I turn my head back, laughing. I am
Just being comical – you aren’t there anyways.
iv. Trying to find a pencil is hard
Sometimes
And it seems like the only thing I find these days are dried up pens.
If they do work, they are the wrong color and I lose my concentration.
I fear the color purple for some reason.
Maybe because that is a strange color for a man to love,
But you did.
v. My stomach doesn’t settle anymore and I want to cut it out.
You never told me you wanted to leave
But you still did
Then the water broke and flooded my mind ruining everything beautiful about you
I am not afraid of water anymore, though.
"water" by Angel Morningstar
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Comments: 35
Shadowed-FerretChild [2006-03-16 20:17:14 +0000 UTC]
I really liked this - it showed full-bodied emotion that kept me gripped throughout the whole poem. And, of course, the image fits perfectly, too. Well done!
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phr3ak000000000 In reply to Shadowed-FerretChild [2006-03-17 05:41:12 +0000 UTC]
thank you so much, i am glad you enjoyed it. means a lot to me
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tehown [2005-09-04 01:19:57 +0000 UTC]
i really love this one alot, I have a certain interest for poses of people naked or not naked buddling. I like the poem also.
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phr3ak000000000 In reply to tehown [2005-09-04 06:32:06 +0000 UTC]
thanks so much! glad you enjoyed it
she is very lovely
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Malefictarium [2005-08-27 17:18:46 +0000 UTC]
very vivid, really brought it down to earth.. absolutely fantastic peice, all in all.
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phr3ak000000000 In reply to Malefictarium [2005-08-27 17:27:55 +0000 UTC]
thank you so much, i am happy when ppl enjoy that one, it is sort of experimental style for me, thank you so much!
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Malefictarium In reply to phr3ak000000000 [2005-08-28 03:51:07 +0000 UTC]
it was my pleasure!
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employdascaskets [2005-08-25 09:06:20 +0000 UTC]
everytime you write something, you seem to wonderfully entwine the pictures with its poem. you are awesome at doing this. Its all so inspiring.
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phr3ak000000000 In reply to employdascaskets [2005-08-25 17:40:12 +0000 UTC]
thank you so much. i appreciate you saying that more than you may know. really means a lot to me.
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employdascaskets In reply to phr3ak000000000 [2005-08-25 21:28:57 +0000 UTC]
well it was much deserved.
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alphie0216 [2005-08-10 17:21:41 +0000 UTC]
totally awesome! again! as always! good choice of pic!
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phr3ak000000000 In reply to alphie0216 [2005-08-10 23:44:24 +0000 UTC]
you are too sweet, thank you! wonderful stock here on DA!
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neo-tek [2005-08-10 05:04:39 +0000 UTC]
very nice work, i like the ideas here, and the way it's structured gives it the feel of a conversation, perhaps with oneself, but perhaps not, it's mysterious. i like mystery
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phr3ak000000000 In reply to neo-tek [2005-08-10 05:06:38 +0000 UTC]
oooh mysteries are fun... ya, this was a different type of peice, i kinda like the turnout. thanks so much!
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neo-tek In reply to phr3ak000000000 [2005-08-10 05:13:43 +0000 UTC]
i like mystery, reminds me why i love life...not knowing how things come about or why is pivotal...of course i still try to figure everything out because i'm still human but mystery is nice lol
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phr3ak000000000 In reply to neo-tek [2005-08-10 05:20:51 +0000 UTC]
oh so do i, understand completely. intruige... need it.
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neo-tek In reply to phr3ak000000000 [2005-08-10 05:40:07 +0000 UTC]
this is truth, intrigue has such a back alley, 007 ring to it, nice word choice lol
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darkwolfj13 [2005-08-10 03:38:02 +0000 UTC]
That is so awsome.. Its so soft, and mellow, flowing from word to sentance and so on... *I'm all quiet and thoughtful now...* I think I'll think awhile...
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phr3ak000000000 In reply to darkwolfj13 [2005-08-10 04:43:20 +0000 UTC]
thank you so muchly
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darkwolfj13 In reply to phr3ak000000000 [2005-08-10 05:22:36 +0000 UTC]
You are very welcome
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obscured-stock [2005-08-10 02:25:14 +0000 UTC]
i really feel this one.. ive been there.. dear lord not too long ago at that.. beautiful words like usualy
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phr3ak000000000 In reply to obscured-stock [2005-08-10 02:31:57 +0000 UTC]
thanks
ya, confusion!
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phr3ak000000000 In reply to ProsePetals [2005-08-10 01:34:02 +0000 UTC]
i would kiss you if there werent a division of miles between us hehe so i guess the monitor will have to do
thank you so so so much
means so much you like!
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ProsePetals In reply to phr3ak000000000 [2005-08-10 01:56:52 +0000 UTC]
I like good poetry. Simple as that.
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KarrinGray [2005-08-10 00:20:49 +0000 UTC]
Very beautiful. You really held my attention throughout the whole piece,it stayed strong the whole way.
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phr3ak000000000 In reply to KarrinGray [2005-08-10 01:24:49 +0000 UTC]
thank you! i am really glad you liked it that's awesome!
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judylee [2005-08-10 00:01:21 +0000 UTC]
This poem is so incredible to me that I don't even need the visual but it just makes the feelings of the words seem that much more vulnerable if that is possible.
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phr3ak000000000 In reply to InfiniteOne [2005-08-09 23:17:05 +0000 UTC]
thank you very much!
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