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Published: 2004-02-10 06:15:11 +0000 UTC; Views: 207; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 73
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A girl sits at the back, alone in her corner.
Her knees are pressed up to the black guard
Between her and the seat before her.
She's dressed as if she's wearing everything she owns.

A too-large jacket, a hooded sweater,
A rather skimpy tank top with sparkling scales,
Dust-stained jeans that are frayed at the edges,
And scraped up sneakers.

She has a continuous glare,
Perhaps it's unintentional.
She glares at people who walk past her,
At the emptiness she stares at all the time,
At the lamposts and grass that pass her window.

Her face is powdered too white,
And a rouge was applied to lie about her cheeks.
She doesn't mean to glare,
Her head is just always hanging down
Lower than it should be.

There are two talking girls near the front,
They speak loudly, as if they owned the cramped area,
As if no one could hear their very private conversations.
One has tightly plaited blond hair, large eyes,
And a pouting mouth, the other has stark brown hair,
She tosses it freely about her shoulders.

They're both too loud.
They invade everyone's privacy with their noises,
The noises that are supposed to mean something,
But say nothing at all. Space-fillers, physically,
And sound-wise.

He has an easy smile that belies his easy-to-anger eyes.
His hair points in such a way that reminds one of ravens.
It's too long and is doused in gel.
The smear of scab across his cheek announces
The kind of life he leads.

As I get off the bus, I can see their eyes on me.
The loud two-pair, the glaring darkened ones,
The maddened glazed ones, the quiet wrinkled ones
Of the woman who sat behind me.
Perhaps my next bus will be emptier.
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Comments: 8

oneyya [2007-03-07 13:05:15 +0000 UTC]

wow you just explained what i go through almost everyday, nice description on life itself fav

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exdevlin In reply to oneyya [2007-03-07 14:15:13 +0000 UTC]

Thanks.. this was written some time ago, and now that I look back on it, it feels like it's just too plain.

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Nyasa [2005-03-02 11:00:01 +0000 UTC]

This is pretty good description here, and a good character build, well put.

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bluespeed9 [2004-02-11 17:04:14 +0000 UTC]

Wow, really nicely done. Kind of reminds me of my days. Everytime I get on the bus I always hope that it will be semi-empty and instead it's always filled with idiots that can't keep their mouths shut. Sigh, I hate public transportation.

Damn you, Syracuse University for making me take the bus to class!

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exdevlin In reply to bluespeed9 [2004-02-11 18:02:24 +0000 UTC]

Damn the transit system around here in general. It does suck ass, Badly. There's always this one girl who I swear has a problem. She's always loud, says things that are totally unnecessary ("Morons and Jehovah's Witnesses are just Christian wannabes".. Some people are just asking for karma to strike them badly.

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bluespeed9 In reply to exdevlin [2004-02-12 01:32:11 +0000 UTC]

If I were you, I would probably help " Karma" out a little bit. You know what I mean, just throw a book at her when she's not looking and then look away. If anyone questions you just say "it was the Gods", odds are they'll belive you or think you're nuts... either way, they'll leave you alone. Oh, divine justice... oh, oh!

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Matsuwara [2004-02-11 02:09:10 +0000 UTC]

Interesting poem. For some reason I keep on imagining a dark trashy street and neon lights! Anyhow, cool poem. It is a loverly piece of art-ness!

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exdevlin In reply to Matsuwara [2004-02-11 03:29:02 +0000 UTC]

A dark trashy street? Wow.. that was totally unexpected. ^^. Cool impression of it though.

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