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FelisGlacialis — RoC_Theory of Mind p28
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A little glimpse of his past...
Opinions, critique and tips are welcome!! Let me know what you think about the page as it comes to panels, bubbles, readability of the text, colours, composition, atmosphere, story plot whatever. Help me improving the quality of the novel XD
Siderians are enormous felids; a horse sized mix between an Oriental cat, tiger and Eurasian lynx - see here some refs: blackmystica.deviantart.com/ar… , www.catterykungfu-tse.nl/Ooste… , www.kimballstock.com/pix/CAT/0… and , www1.clikpic.com/cavturbo/imag… , rainman65.deviantart.com/art/A… .
Special thanks to , as beta-readers, my cats Jayto, Neo and Nintu, the many other cats, tigers, Eurasian lynxes and hyenas as models and of course all the people on DA for helpful tips!
Art, siderian species, character and story by me. Please don't copy and/or use it without my permission!
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Just a spoonfull of sugar to help the medicinal lies go down, eh? Slick. I like him.
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This is a good page which fills Yves with a lot of personality. Nice one!
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Thanks!! yeah indeed - also...the problem is that his personality doesn't fit at all to the kinda job he has to do...
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You're welcome! Mmh, that's a problem... I'm looking forward to new pages.
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Good!! At the moment p31 &32 are in production XD
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Mmm~ I love glimpse of background story. Glimpses or background story are delicious, and I eat them up. And you didn't overdo it either, which is great! Some comic artists fall into the trap of doing massive flashbacks in the middle of beginning of their story, but this page sums it up nicely and neatly without going to deeply into it yet!
The situation makes me wonder at our main character's true feelings though. Clearly, he would be an outside and prisoner in such a situation ... but, ultimately, how he truly feels about it may be confusing even to him. Hm, only time will tell where his loyalties will lie when they matter most, methinks ... C:
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Thanks for your opinion hehe! Yeah it also has a lot to do with Yves' personality - I mean how he deals with the situation. He's pretty impulsive, but also very optimistic and friendly. And too honest ... but maybe that confuses him even more...But in the next chapter some things will become more clear XD
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You are getting better with the panels and bubbles, there are jst a few details that confuse a little but you have really got better
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I'll make a line between the bubbles taht are connected to one panel. I think that will be more clear because I usually get lost in 'flying' bubbles too - but I saw it often in other comics so I gave it a try i this page - but it seems to come out confusing - you're not the only one mentioning it XD - so time to fix the problem
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what exactly confuses you?
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It confuses a little the order of the bubbles because on the left panel they are very close the bubbles so you think that they are in order and then the bubbles that are on the right side are the next ones, i dunno if i explain what i mean xD
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The order of your bubbles were a little confusing to me. I kept reading them out of order... maybe if you connected them with a little line or something? 
Otherwise very good
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Good idea - I tried it first, but thought that it disturbs. I'll try a thinner line then
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okay! Good luck!
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Thankies!! yeah it's how it is in the story...I sometimes really can't control events ^^
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oh yes i know still it's sad that it has to be that way. *I'm not suggesting to change anything lol* Again I think I've said this before but I think it's good to leave some things unanswered because...it's giving the characters their privacy just like any other real breathing creature.
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I thought about Yves wanting to cry when he told about the hyenas.
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Ha yeah - he's rather hopeless in this situation...
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This page is great) Especially I love background and colors )
I feel sorry for Yves, his story is touching. I hope he will unite with other cheederians... )
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You will see XD
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0_o..didn't think he was going to be that honest...
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Yves can't lie - that's his problem...
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oh tragic history D:
but i hope this can convince Nigras to accept Yves without hitting him again O.o
But was Yves limited of all his actions and where he could go while he was raised by the Hyenas?
btw awesome page like always!
i'm adoring to read it
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Yesh - more or less, they tracked him down wherever he was and always had to hunt together with the hyenas and such. But hidden from other cheeds as much as possible.
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Aww, poor Yves - whilst the hyenas may have saved him, they also enslaved him
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More or less yeah - the background will become more clear later XD
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I'm sure it will, and it'll look great just like the rest of your comic. 
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Great page. The dialog is easy to read, and I just love the composition of the whole page here, nice work ^^.
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Thanks!! - the new font helped a lot. I only make some grammer mistakes sometimes..but now I've a whole beta-read team enlish native speakers
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Yes, the grammar was a little awkward at times XD, but it seems fine in your latest page
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Feel free to comment on the previous pages and help me to improve the comic quality XD
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I would but, english is not my first language either 
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ha yeah since I'm learning a third language at the moment its getting a total language mess in my head
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Ha, I feel for you XD. Good luck with that third language ^^, I had Italian class in my prev school but I didnt learn shitz XD.
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Your felids are just so unique and interesting. 8D
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Thanks! They are one of the rare original felid species that are not pantherines XD - well...they have some tiger-features but they are mainly inspired by Oriental cats and Eurasian lynxes XD - making them as a Siamese- tiger-lynx hybrid rather unique I think XD
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It's definitely a very intriguing mix, and it gives them a special look :3
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