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Srry - late again...- I had to rush and had very little time for this page this week (my mother came to visit me and last week ~RiverRaven visited me 8D) - so....there might be typo's and grammer errors. People, please be critical!! (on panelling, spelling, readability, clichΓ©s and well...is it not too blue-overloaded?)
Oh - and finally another character - Russito- says something...he's also (like Thaldo, right next to him) a character I have already 10 years and he hardly changed either...nice to see him back too
Cheederians are enormous FELIDs (lynx - oriental cat- tiger hybrids) - no NOT wolves!!!! Some people still seem to think...but this cheed is a mix between these felids: [link] , [link] , [link] and , [link] , [link] .
Special thanks to , as beta-readers, my cats Jayto, Neo and Nintu, the many other cats, tigers, Eurasian lynxes and hyenas as models and of course all the people on DA for helpful tips!
Art, Cheederian species, character and story by me. Please don't copy and/or use it without my permission!
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Hmmmm if I might point out, I the bubble that says "-and even talking to them. You seem to-" i think you should add 'be' to the end, just to make it flow better into the next bubble.
Well that's just me so whatever, its an awesome story, now i will go read the rest
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Ohh O.o" i guess things got serious for Yves now! i wonder what's gonna be his reaction next O3o
but like always..great page! i'm adoring your style and the comic of course!
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Thanks! yeah it's gonna be tense XD
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ohh...run Yves run!
he is all white he could did a hole in the snow and hide and close his eyes then nobody would see him
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OMG! So Good! Awesome details, and can't wait for the next one!!
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Thankies!
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Same here -Yves is XD
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I can relate to him D:
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Ok, being critical! Constructively
Story wise I'm very interested to see what happens. I love the subtle facial expressions you give these characters while still making them look natural.
Great job mate
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Thanks for your opinion!! I see what you mean with the first one - I now see it too...a little much work to correct but he was supposted to talk to Yves. I nice lesson for next panels - on the last one; the black female (Sasha) tries to stop the black male (Nigras) XD- but maybe it's good that it's rather confusing, since it's a confusing situation XDDD
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you are very clever. It's clear that there is a lot that has gone on...in between his activities with they hyena's and the crystals. *particulary Sasha since they know each others names* At first I thought "oh he's been spotted, -you say its Thaldo- the whole family appears and it seems like a first time sighting btwen and these Cheeds until he says her names and now them saying they have observed him a while. So there is a big time gap. For interesting back-flashes I suppose? lol. Keeps you thinkng forward and backwards great job. *Thanks Sasha for saving his butt here* Gosh if I was Yves and that big dark male was comming at me-pft I'd pass out of terror.
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Clever with what? oeh yeah I got it - hehe this story have been hanging around in my mind in over ten years - and still some things are not entirely claer but will be clear when I come to that point. I show actually only a few scenes of the whole story so that it becomes interesting for a comic - I try to work out what is most effecient and most 'nice' for readers to follow hehe - and creating gaps is one way to make readers curious 
Haha and Yves is scared like hell - and even though to scared taht he doesn't dare to defend ...
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lol I see. I know I have a lot of open loop holes in my Avalutin *the Arrow Wolves* story. I keep a lot of things unanwered to give the characters their prviace. Just like any real person/creature. Because we dont know EVERYTHING in a persons life and all..that's THEIR buisness. So In the end of my story I leave a lot of door's open, things Mya is considering and promises yet to be kept...but left alone. But I know most of the answeres to those open doors...some of them I dont ask though because I am respecting the characters personal space. 
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quick question - how did the Avalutins form chance to what it is now? They look a bi tlike one of my favourite dog breeds: you knwo Ibizan hounds/Podenco Ibicenco's? [link] , [link] , [link] , [link]
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Yes! I use Ibizan hounds, Grayhounds, Borzoi's, Maned Wolves, Pharoh hounds and a lot of sight hounds as refrences for Avalutins. I guess I always thought the species could be compared to..but when I first started drawing them I NEVER used refrences I just drew them out of my head *I am soon going to start posting those older drawings!* anyway, and then when I started drawing them I had seen how using a real animal refrence had helped you for Cheederians, and was also helping me draw your cheeds so then my computer was taken over by folders of sighthounds, arabian horses and unicorns. *I'm picky about equine refrences though, it must be very elagent, like the 'Last Unicor' or the 'Humpedback Horse' style of horse art to use for refrence for Avalutins!* And I LOVE Sight hounds! And Ibizian hounds are so beautiful with their coat colors that sweet face and elagent but strong body, and these HUGE EARS! we know how I am about big ears hahahhaa! So I guess..kind of how Cheederians left the TWness behind to become a totall feline, my species also evloved mostly including the more arched spines and deep chests of the Sight hounds *particulary Borzoi's because I think they are my favorite Sight Hound* Thanks for askign!
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"You seemed to.. part their plan.."
*being critical* Does not make sense. Maybe: "You seem to be... PART OF THEIR PLAN!" I think that makes more sense... HOPE IT HELPS
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Thanks!! Does it look better now like this? I tbhink you got a good point
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oh wait- now I see - I first had it written like 'seem to - work for them', later I changed it into 'seemed to be part of their plan' but I forgot to add the 'to' when changibg the second sentence
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I agree with ~HeavenNeedsAngels that it sounds better, but it still says "You seemed to.." instead of "You seem to be.." although you said you changed it?
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oeh yeah- da was k dacht eerst datt ginc om de capslock - maar daarna zag k dat k ook dat woord vergeten was - eerst stond dr namelijk 'seemed to -work for them'- had t later veranderd in dit en toen de 'to' in alle haast vergeten 
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You gas it fixed
K moet es kijken wanneer ik fatsoenlijk tijd heb om online te komen. Heb net 3 minuten 'vrij' voordat k naar bed ga, dus gaak maar multitasken (appel eten en snel DA checken XD). Ik zal snel weer mailen! Das wa handiger dan hier lappen tekst typen...
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No worries! And I think so,...
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