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fluffySlipper — Flowey Is Not a Good Life Coach - Chap. 1, page 2
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Published: 2016-11-28 16:12:07 +0000 UTC; Views: 32708; Favourites: 303; Downloads: 67
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I'm still figuring out how the whole comic thing works, so... It'll only get better from here 
EDIT: lol I thought I could do 2 days a week
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The original story by UnrestedJade can be found here: archiveofourown.org/works/5056…
Also if you want to make a comic dub of this, please go ahead! I totally encourage it. Just give credit to me and UnrestedJade.
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I am enjoying the dialog between them so far plus the expressions go along so well with this unique art style it really shows great potential bravo on the art fluffySlipper /) hmm interesting that Flowey says to himself Papyrus surprises me like no one else it seems like he enjoys some of his company its actually kind of nice to have Flowey think that about are silly skeleton Papyrus it makes me happy
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Gotta love flowey he is so good with manipulation.
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If he has no blood then how does he have a regular tongue?
It shows in game too. Huh, probably Undertale logic itself
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I can’t tell... is Flowey being genuine right now??? It’s kinda cool but weird at the same time! ... Maybe I should read the actual story first...?
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I really like Flowey's expression in the 4th panel quite a lot. I like how, at least so far, you can wring a lot of expressions out of him despite his simplistic facial features. That's no easy feat. (the 5th panel he reminds me of a Don Hertzfeldt drawing.)
I like how dynamic your camera angles are. You have the camera moving a lot and have a lot of different framing. It's something I've always struggled with the most. And why I'm no good as a Storyboarder. In my own comic my camera angles tend to be rather static. I can't decide if that's a setback or not, because I like to focus on things like expression changes and changes in body language. Whereas here you keep a calm conversation visually interesting and dynamic even though there's no real physical movement.
I still really like the gemmed roof as well, as I said before.
Sorry I'm being so slow with these u.u;
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Whoa I just looked up Don Hertzfeldt and I realized I've totally seen his stuff around. I can see the similarities too; good job pointing that out!
I think you've just gotta try doing more dynamic angles, and you'll do them more and more as you get the hang of it. Keeping conversation interesting is a challenge, but there are definitely multiple ways to go about it. You're doing a good job of it in your comic, even without using dynamic camera angles
Also take your time reading these, and it's fine if you don't comment on every page. Just read and enjoy the ride! (also sorry for the super late responses )
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X'D I'm sorry if comparison isn't something you like. I forget some people don't like it because it doesn't bug me, so I forget ;w; sorry if that bugged you and you were too polite to mention it
And thank you very much! 
and thanks ;w; again I'm sorry I'm slow. And I'd like to comment on every page if I can X'D but we'll see if that's possible. If I don't I'm sorry and just know it's because I'm lame sometimes and not because I dislike the page.
Also sorry for the late reply 
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No, comparison is very appreciated! Actual art-related comments are rare enough on these pages, and comparisons to other artists are even rarer. They help me see my art in a new light, which is vital to being able to improve. Also never be afraid to offer constructive criticism; I know my art isn't perfect, and it's the best way to help an artist grow.
Don't worry about late replies, the fact that you're replying at all is amazing. Everyone has their own life to worry about first, after all. I reply late all the time, so don't worry about it
Also I hope you feel happier soon. Interaction certainly helps, and I want you to know that you're truly a wonderful person.
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Translated in french : pikeseria.deviantart.com/art/F…
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i expected a thing like "HOLY SPAGHETTI really?"
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I've read this story twice so I'm internally cringing....
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"Yeah. I was a fricking seed before I turned into a flower!" *audience heard from a distance, laughing their asses off painfully*
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The end. That's hilarious lol
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"Yeah, Before... I was a horrible nightmare with six souls. Remember Frisk?"
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RUN, PAPYRUS!!!!!!!! GET AWAY WHILE YOU HAVE A CHANCE!!!! ;^;
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Gosh I love how you draw Papyrus. He's so sweet... which makes it all the worse knowing what's about to happen to him, brrr.
I love all the different angles you use, and the shots of the scenery, like in the fourth panel there. It's really simple but really effective. Gosh I hope I can learn to make comics this good.
By the way, have you let the author know you're making this?
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Thank you! I'm glad you appreciate the thought put into the panel layout. I'm just figuring this out myself right now, but I'm glad it's working out fine.
Also I haven't contacted the author yet, though I really should have whoops. I'm going to now though. Thanks for the feedback
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I am so anxious just because I know how the story goes. Ahh, back when things were calm and peaceful.
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Ooh, the interesting part's about to come next...
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